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Exercise 26. No.1. (Worse) Communicators must share a common language or protocol so that we can easily understand each other. (Better) Communicators must share a common language or protocol so that they can easily understand each other. No.2.
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No.1 • (Worse) Communicators must share a common language or protocol so that we can easily understand each other. • (Better) Communicators must share a common language or protocol so that they can easily understand each other.
No.2 • (Worse) A computer mouse needs some available workspace and even the beginning user can operate them with very little difficulty. • (Better) A computer mouse needs some available workspace and even the beginning user can operate one with very little difficulty.
No.3 • (Worse) Execute the program commands and the iteration steps must be repeated. • (Better) Execute the program commands and repeat the iteration steps.
No.4 • (Worse) The supervisor asked her employees if the assignment was ready and could it be handed in tomorrow. • (Better 1) The supervisor asked her employees if the assignment was ready and could be handed in tomorrow.
No.4 (cont.) • (Better 2) The supervisor asked her employees if the assignment was ready to be handed in tomorrow.
No.5 • (Worse) The instructor made the class assignment and a follow up quiz was given by him. • (Better) The instructor made the class assignment and gave a follow up quiz.
No.6 • (Worse) For the user to clean the inside of a keyboard, you must remove the screws on the back of the keyboard with a very small screwdriver. • (Better 1) For the user to clean the inside of a keyboard, he or she must remove the screws on the back of the keyboard with a very small screwdriver.
No.6 • (Better 2) The user can clean the inside of a keyboard by removing the screws on the back of the keyboard with a very small screwdriver.
No.7 • (Worse) The rewritable recorder is designed to use one CD over and over and cost approximately $400. • (Better 1) The re-writable recorder is designed to use one CD over and over and costs approximately $400.
No.7 (cont.) • (Better 2) The re-writable recorder is designed for one CD to be reused and costs approximately $400.
No.8 • (Worse) The consumer should know the pros and cons of a compact disk recorded when purchasing them. • (Better) The consumer should know the pros and cons of a compact disk recorded when purchasing one.
No.9 • (Worse) The company decided to update the operating systems on the engineering department computers so they can more easily access the mainframe. • (Better 1) The company decided to update the operating systems on the engineering department computers so the engineers can more easily access the mainframe.
No.9 • (Better 2) The company decided to update the operating systems on the engineering department computers to more easily access the mainframe.
No.10 • (Worse) The lecturer indicated that the role of telecommunications was increasingly common in daily life. • (Better) The lecturer indicated that the role of telecommunications is increasingly common in daily life.
[Note 7.16] • Although it is important to maintain a consistent verb tense, one exception to the rule is when the writer is stating a fact, situation or assumption. • Since telecommunicationsin daily life is increasingly common is a fact, present tense should be used. • Under this circumstance, shifting verb tenses in a sentences is acceptable.
No.11 • (Worse) The new cartridges are large and should last a long time, making it more attractive than the older ones. • (Better) The new cartridges are large and should last a long time, making them more attractive than the older ones.
No.12 • (Worse) The college will purchase more computers in the near future so that you can communicate with your teachers on-line. • (Better) The college will purchase more computers in the near future so that students can communicate with your teachers on-line.
No.13 • (Worse) Space is needed to allow movement since a mouse is needed to move to perform its functions. • (Better 1) Space is needed to allow movement since a mouse needs to move to perform its functions. • (Better 2) Space is needed to a mouse to perform its functions.
No.14 • (Worse) Netscape Navigator allows the e-mail user to access their accounts from anywhere around the world. • (Better) Netscape Navigator allows e-mail users to access their accounts from anywhere around the world.