Thinking between sentences

1. Thinking between sentences A significant amount of the time we spend writing we actually spend re-reading what we have already written and thinking about what to write next…

2. Discuss the extent to which non-pecuniary benefits may affect the supply of labour to various occupations.

3. (I want to directly answer the question. The first sentence will be my topic sentence.) In addition to pecuniary benefits, (ie salaries and financial bonuses) non-pecuniary benefits, such as holidays, may be used by firms to attract employees. (24)

4. Non-pecuniary benefits, such as holidays, may be used, in addition to pecuniary benefits, (ie salaries and financial bonuses) by firms to attract employees. (I need to be more detailed with a specific example of a non-pecuniary benefit in a defined occupation.) Good working conditions is a non-pecuniary benefit which attracts employees to firms like Apple, which deliberately provides a sophisticated relaxed environment to work in. (24)

5. Good working conditions is a non-pecuniary benefit which attracts employees to firms like Apple, which deliberately provides a sophisticated relaxed environment to work. (Now I need to develop the point, emphasising how the non-pecuniary benefits are complex and inter-related.) However, non-pecuniary benefits are complex; you would think the supply for refuse collectors would be low but this is offset by the low level qualifications required. (26)

6. However, non-pecuniary benefits are complex. You would think the supply for refuse collectors would be low but this if offset by the low level qualifications required. (I need to finish this paragraph with a bit about the relationship between pecuniary and non-pecuniary benefits.) Ultimately, attracting employees is aboutthe overall rewards, or net advantage, of a particular occupation, taking into account both pecuniary and non-pecuniary benefits. (23)

7. Ultimately, attracting employees is aboutthe overall rewards, or net advantage, of a particular occupation, taking into account both pecuniary and non-pecuniary benefits. (Next paragraph – I need to look back to the last paragraph and forward to the next.) Whilst teaching is now a relatively well-paid profession it is its net advantage as an occupation which is attractive to employees. (22)

8. In addition to pecuniary benefits, (ie salaries and financial bonuses) non-pecuniary benefits, such as holidays, may be used by firms to attract employees. Good working conditions are a non-pecuniary benefit which attracts employees to firms like Apple, which deliberately provides a sophisticated relaxed environment to work in. However, non-pecuniary benefits are complex; you would think the supply for refuse collectors would be low but this is offset by the low level qualifications required. Ultimately, attracting employees is aboutthe overall rewards, or net advantage, of a particular occupation, taking into account both pecuniary and non-pecuniary benefits. (97) Whilst teaching is now a relatively well-paid profession it is its net advantage as an occupation which is attractive to employees. (22)

9. Other thoughts… • We think about the next sentence whilst we are writing, especially under time pressure; • Write in singles not doubles; • Write in positives; • Use the right word, not a high-sounding one; • Write in shorter rather than longer sentences; • Twentyish words per sentence maximum; • Four sentences per paragraph; • Eight to ten paragraphs (or thirty-forty sentences) make an essay.