L - UC: Unclear

3. L-UC: Unclear “Myth is also a human psyche and unconscious, explaining human basic needs. It’s good to study it for the values of profoundly influence their way of perceiving reality and hence their behavior.” “Mythisalso provides insight into the a human psyche and unconscious, explaining human basic needs. It’s good to study it for the values of profoundly influence their way of perceiving reality and hence their behavior.”

4. L-PR: Pronoun Reference “Mythisalso provides insight into the a human psyche and unconscious, explaining human basic needs. It’s good to study it for the values of profoundly influence their way of perceiving reality and hence their behavior.” “Mythisalso provides insight into the a human psyche and unconscious, explaining human basic needs. It’s good to study it for the values of profoundly influence their way of perceiving reality and hence their behavior.”

5. L-IL: Inappropriate Language “Apsu wanted to kill his kids because they were annoying him. Before Apsu had the chance to kill them Tiamat snitched then Apsu died.” “Apsu wanted to kill his kids because they were annoying him. Before Apsu had the chance to kill them Tiamatsnitched then Apsu died.”

6. L-IT: Inappropriate Tone “Freud’s theory was crazy because he believed that we all want to sleep with our mother. I don’t want to sleep with my mother; therefore, his theory is wrong.”

7. L-ID: Inappropriate Diction “A myth is a story that is told for ages down. A thing that a certain group of people believe in” “A myth is a story that is told for ages down. A thing that a certain group of people believe in”

8. L-WW: Wrong Word “In the story of ‘Apsu and Tiamat,’ which they present as fresh water and salt water.” “In the story of ‘Apsu and Tiamat,’ which they personify as fresh water and salt water.” (misunderstanding, fragment sentence)

9. L-AL: Awkward Language “We evaluate myths as nearly everything begin with the world in darkness, and via one or more intelligent creators, proceed to make order from chaos.” “When evaluating myths, it appears that nearly all begin with a world in darkness, and, via one or more intelligent creators, proceed to make order from chaos.”

10. L-CL: Cliché “What is mythology? Mythology is…”

11. L-RW: Repetitious Wording “Frazer talks about magic which brought the whole essay back to the whole thing which is myth.” “Frazer talks about magic which brought the whole essay back to the whole thing which is myth.” (run-on, diction)

12. L-RR: Repetitious Rhythm “Myths are a type of traditional literature. Myths are usually passed down from generation to generations orally. Myths are viewed as ‘ideology in narrative form’ which explains…” “Myths are a type of traditional literature. Myths are usually passed down from generation to generations orally. Myths are viewed as ‘ideology in narrative form’ which explains…”

13. L-FP: Surplus First Person “When I think of a myth I think of a story that describes the origin time from the beginning up until now.” “Myth is a story that describes the origin time from the beginning up until now.”

14. P-NT: No Transition “We study myth because they reveal a culture’s worldview and the framework for human psyche in a universal context. Myths have a theme of someone doing heroic acts.” “We study myth because they reveal a culture’s worldview and the framework for human psyche in a universal context. Many cultural myths reveal their respective worldviews and psychic framework through the depiction of heroic acts.”

15. P-WT: Weak Transition “In my personal opinion, without myth there would be a lot of gaps in between time to explain how we came to be. An example of a myth/theory is EnumaElish.” “In my personal opinion, without myth there would be a lot of gaps in between time to explain how we came to be. The Babalonian creation story, EnumaElish, portrays and interest perspective on the creation of mankind.”

16. P-WC: Weak Closing “In conclusion, myth is not just myth but it’s sort of a background on how our world was before we were created.” “In conclusion, myth is not just myth but it’s sort of a background on how our world was before we were created, revealing mankind’s desperate desire to understand the world in which we live. Man will strive to seek answers to unanswerable questions, ultimately placing priority over having an answer, rather than possessing truth.

17. P-TT: Too Many Topics “The myth of the story explains the supernatural and the relationship with the divine. Myth also explains psychology as essential things about the patterns of how we are human think. How we plan to live life.”

18. P-II: Insufficient Supporting Ideas “TBD”

19. C-SF: Sentence Fragment “A being would create the world, put animals, humans, and the mountains.”

20. C-RO: Run-On Sentences “So when people ask how was myth created I say look back at the things you know because that’s how the world was created it all began with nothing.” “So when people ask how was myth created, I say look back at the things you know, because that’s how the world was created; it all began with nothing.”

21. C-IP: Indicating Possession “Freud psychological method was used in the stories EnumaElish, Theogony, and also in Genesis.” “Freud’s psychological method was used in the stories EnumaElish, Theogony, and also in Genesis.”

22. C-HO: Homonyms “In this current century their is a distinction of things which are believed to answer the question how.” “In this current century there is a distinction of things which are believed to answer the question how.”

23. C-PL: Plural/Singular “What these myths have in common with each other is it’s people was of finding meaning and stability in life.” “What these myths have in common with each other is it’s peopleswas of finding meaning and stability in life.”

24. C-SV: Subject-Verb Agreement “Which bring me to the mother and father, it seems that the father have all the power and he is ruler of everything while the mother is the sweet caretaker of her children.” “Which brings me to the mother and father, it seems that the fatherhas allthe power and he is ruler of everything while the mother is the sweet caretaker of her children.”

25. C-VT: Wrong/Shifting Tense “It was call the Earth which was the dry land and heaven was full of clouds.” “It was calledthe Earth which was the dry land and heaven was full of clouds.”

26. U-EA: Extend Analysis “This is one of the reasons why myth is important and to learn it. It tells you how certain things are created and it also tells you the purpose of them.”

27. U-UC: Unclear Analysis “The ‘Genesis’ myth eventually explained where men and women; how there were created. It also explained the meaning of the ‘tree’ and the ‘apple’ that was on the tree. “The ‘Genesis’ myth eventually explained where men and women; how there were created. It also explained the meaning of the ‘tree’ and the ‘apple’ that was on the tree. (RW)

28. U-MI: Misunderstood Idea “Take Tiamat and Apsu for example. They were created by salt water and regular water.” “Take Tiamat and Apsu for example. They were personified as salt water and regular water.”

29. U-RA: Repetitious Analysis “Myths are created to tell religious beliefs, the origin of man, and explain the natural world . . . They tell people how they came to be and also unite them. We analyze myth as a story that people tell to explain about how the world was created.” “Myths are created to tell religious beliefs, the origin of man, and explain the natural world . . . They tell people how they came to be and also unite them. We analyze myth as a story that people tell to explain about how the world was created.”

30. U-UR: Unsound Reasoning “This goes to show that magic isn’t real cause it hasn’t been proven by scientific people and same goes with myth and that also hasn’t been proven by anyone. As a result of all this we could say that there is no such thing as myth.”

31. E-NA: No Analysis “Genesis tells us how the world was created. ‘Let there be light.’ Genesis also tells us how man came to be”

32. E-EA: Extend Analysis “TBD”

33. E-CQ: Condense Quote Frazer said, “Thus the old magical theory of the seasons was displaced, or rather supplemented, by a religious theory. For although men now attributed the annual cycle of change primarily to corresponding changes in their deities, they still thought that by performing certain magical rites they could aid the god who was the principle of life, in his struggle with the opposing principle of death.” Frazer believed that old magical theory was supplemented by a religious theory, as man still “thought that by performing certain magical rites they could aid the god who was the principle of life, in his struggle with the opposing principle of death” (Frazer 12).

34. E-IR: Irrelevant Quote “TBD”

35. E-US: Unnecessary Summary “Myth is also seen as the origins of the world, humanity, and social culture. The book EnumaElish is considered a myth to me. The book EnumaElish is about…”

36. E-IC: Improper Citation God said “let there be light.” God said, “Let there be light” (Genesis 1:3).

37. E-IQ: Introduce Quote This story although it’s a myth but its related to our society where father are more dominant than mothers and mothers however are so protectable. “How could we allow what we ourselves created to perish?”

38. E-EQ: Extend Quote “TBD”

39. E-PE: Provide Evidence “In his book The Golden Bough, he starts off by saying before humans were smart, they thought that they controlled everything such as the agriculture, seasons, and even animals.” “In his book The Golden Bough, Frazer states, “[insert quote],” revealing his belief that humans thought that they controlled everything such as the agriculture, seasons, and even animals.”

40. S-IT: Irrelevant to Thesis TBD

41. S-IA: Irrelevant to Argument “TBD”

42. S-NA: No Argument “TBD”