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Wednesday September 4, 2013. Bellwork #2: Read the following paragraph. DO NOT WRITE IT DOWN !!! Only write what is in red!
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WednesdaySeptember 4, 2013 Bellwork #2: Read the following paragraph. DO NOT WRITE IT DOWN!!! Only write what is in red! The sun glared in my eyes through the half-open blinds. I heard the sound of plates and glasses clanking, so I knew my mom was busy making breakfast. I pulled the itchy wool blanket over my head, but the warm smell of toast lured me out of the bed. As I entered the kitchen, I saw my mom slathering jelly on the steaming bread. I took a bite, and the sticky sweetness of the jelly made my mouth water. Write a sensory detail chart like the one I gave you. List all of the sensory details in the above paragraph: EX: Event/Item Sensory details Blanket itchy wool blanket
September Birthdays • Raise your hand, so I can add you to the calendar! • Get out your permission slips for Call It Courage
Sensory Details • Supply: person, grab your bag • Writer: Make a chart with 5 columns TOP LINE= item Underneath it write the sensory details your partners tell you • Gluer: Guessers (eyes closed when guessing!!) -Give at least 2 SENSORY details to describe before you guess and writer writes it down • Task Manager: Guessers (eyes closed when guessing!!) -Give at least 2 SENSORY details to describe before you guess and writer writes it down
Think about the following scenario: “You’re a student and you’re really hungry and it’s lunchtime. You have your cold lunch sack with you in the lunchroom at your table, but you haven’t opened it yet. You have a sneaky suspicion that your mother accidentally gave you your brother’s tuna fish sandwich when she packed the lunches this morning, and you hate tuna fish. You know your heart will sink if you discover your peanut butter sandwich is not in the sack.” Personal Narrative…
“If you, as student, open the sack and examine the sandwich, how long would that take in real time?” Pantomime (simply do the action using your hands) the action of opening a lunch sack and unwrapping a sandwich to see how very little time it takes. “A good writer can take ten or fifteen seconds of everyday action and slow it down…turn it into a slow-motion writing moment, if you will.” Personal Narrative…
Example of an effective slow motion paragraph: The lunch bag sat in front of me, and my stomach growled. I wondered ifMom accidentally gave me the tuna fish sandwich. What in the world will I do for food? I don’t have money for a hot lunch. I looked to my left. Stephen had his usual peanut butter sandwich. His mother hadn’t messed up his lunch. I looked to my right. Jack had his usual bologna sandwich because Jack doesn’t like peanut butter. What was in my bag? I unfolded the brown paper once, then twice, and I leaned forward, squinting into the open sack. Personal Narrative…
Personal Narrative…. Beneath the napkin I could see the tin foil that my sandwich was wrapped in. I smelled inside the sack, but it smelled like a bag, not like peanut butter or fish. There was only one way to know for sure what was wrapped inside the foil. I reached in, and the paper crinkled. I could feel the sweat forming on my brow as I unwrapped that foil. And there it was: the tell-tale smudge of peanut butter on an edge of the crust. I was safe. I would not go hungry today.
Your turn to try it… Be sure and notice what the writer of the passage did to make the moment last: • 1) used relevant sensory details **Use your chart! • 2) included others in the scene • 3) zoomed in on interesting smaller details.
Working with a partner, and based on the model, you will write about a moment using slow-motion writing techniques. The moment you are going to write about should—in real time—last only 10-15 seconds. When reading the scene out loud, the story should last over a minute. • A coin has been flipped and the outcome if it comes up heads is important. • When a classroom window is opened, a gust of wind blows the papers off of someone’s desk. • A sports moment, like saving a goal in soccer or dropping a pop fly that is coming towards you. • A romantic moment, like the first time a boy is brave enough to hold a girl’s hand. • An anxious student watches the classroom clock tick down its last fifteen seconds of the school day.
Partner A: WriterPartner B: Task Manager/Time keeper (you have 12 min.)During your slow motion moment, what interesting details will your “writer’s movie camera” be able to take in that a person watching the scene in real time might miss? 1) Are there sensory images that might be more interesting with the “writer’s camera” running in slower motion? EXAMPLE: Sounds? Smells? Sensations of touch? etc. 2) Are there minor characters that might be noticed by the camera now that the scene is being written in slower motion? 3) Are there smaller details that might, when noticed and added to the description, help slow down the motion?
Your turn to come up with your idea for a time you were little… • This assignment will be due on Friday for a test grade. • MUST include a slow motion paragraph.
Preposition Pictionary! • EVERYONE needs a piece of paper… • Divide the class in half! • Everyone not guessing has to write down the prepositional phrase on a piece of paper. • Watch me first!
