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TAKE OUT YOUR GAME OF SCHOOL ESSAY. READ YOUR ENTIRE ESSAY OUT LOUD (BUT NOT LOUDLY). AS YOU READ, MARK ANY ERRORS YOU FIND WITH A COLORED PEN. LET’S TALK ABOUT HOOKS. WHAT ARE THEY? DO YOU HAVE ONE IN YOUR PAPER?. http://davincihumanities11.wikispaces.com/file/view/hooks.pdf.
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TAKE OUT YOUR GAME OF SCHOOL ESSAY
READ YOUR ENTIRE ESSAY OUT LOUD (BUT NOT LOUDLY). AS YOU READ, MARK ANY ERRORS YOU FIND WITH A COLORED PEN.
LET’S TALK ABOUT HOOKS. WHAT ARE THEY? DO YOU HAVE ONE IN YOUR PAPER? http://davincihumanities11.wikispaces.com/file/view/hooks.pdf
UNDERLINE YOUR THESIS. *DOES IT INTRODUCE ROBERT FRIED AND THE GAME OF SCHOOL? *DOES IT SAY THE EXTENT TO WHICH YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH FRIED? *DOES IT HAVE A “BECAUSE” CLAUSE THAT GIVES A REASON FOR YOUR AGREEMENT/DISAGREEMENT? MAKE NOTES TO YOURSELF ABOUT WHAT YOU NEED TO DO TO IMPROVE YOUR THESIS.
ORGANIZATION— • DESCRIBE HOW YOU ORGANIZED THE REST OF YOUR PAPER TO YOUR SEAT PARTNER. • DOES THE ORGANIZATION MAKE SENSE? • DOES EACH PART OF YOUR PAPER HAVE A CLAIM THAT CONNECTS THAT PIECE TO YOUR THESIS? IF NOT, MAKE YOURSELF A NOTE TO ADD WHAT IS MISSING.
EXAMPLES ARE YOUR EXAMPLES SPECIFIC WHEN YOU DESCRIBE YOUR EXPERIENCES? DETAILS HELP A READER UNDERSTAND WHAT YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT.
WHICH IS BETTER AND WHY? DISCUSS WITH YOUR SEAT PARTNER: I OFTEN FELT SOCIALLY ISOLATED THERE I WAS, SITTING MOROSELY ON THE PLAYGROUND BENCH NIBBLING MY P B AND J, MISERABLY WATCHING THE OTHER SEVEN YEAR OLDS RUN AROUND HAVING THE TIME OF THEIR LIVES. DOES EACH EXAMPLE RELATE BACK TO SOMETHING FRIED SAID ABOUT SCHOOL? HAVE YOU QUOTED THE AUTHOR?