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REDUNDANCY. Writing. The needless repetition of words In the writing section, it offers you to OMIT the underlined portion. Use this often on this type of question. What is redundancy?. The diner closes at 3 A.M. in the morning. Fix? The diner closes at 3 A.M.
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REDUNDANCY Writing
The needless repetition of words • In the writing section, it offers you to OMIT the underlined portion. • Use this often on this type of question. What is redundancy?
The diner closes at 3 A.M. in the morning. • Fix? • The diner closes at 3 A.M. • In my opinion, I think we should go get some food. • Fix? • In my opinion, we should go get some food. • I think we should go get some food. Which sentence is right or wrong?
"I believe in an America where millions of Americans believe in an America that's the America millions of Americans believe in. That's the America I love.“ (Governor Mitt Romney) Fix? “I love and believe in America.”
"Planning your funeral service in advance can offer emotional and financial security for you and your family during the funeral.“ (Erlewein Mortuary) • Fix? • Planning your funeral service can offer emotional and financial security for your family.
" . . . To avoid needless repetition, apply this rule: if one word swallows the meaning of other words, use that word alone."(Bryan Garner) • Assignment: • Write 5 redundancy sentences; share with table and pick 2 best sentences to share with class. • Top 3 sentences voted most redundant gets 5 extra credit points.
They killed the fly to death. • We planned the surprise ambush. • I forgot my biology homework for biology. • The unicorn lemming jumped off the high cliff to the bottom of the cliff where it later died at the foot of the cliff it jumped off of. • Our world is a world filled with people of the world who believe that they can leave this world with worldly things. Most redundant sentence