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Cutting the Fat from Composition

Cutting the Fat from Composition . No “ jiggly parts” in composition! . Muscular writing scores points!. Deadwood—Part I. Redundancy: words which repeat the same idea or whose meanings overlap In this day and time Repeated again A true fact Red in color. Deadwood—Part II.

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Cutting the Fat from Composition

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  1. Cutting the Fat from Composition

  2. No “jiggly parts” in composition!

  3. Muscular writing scores points!

  4. Deadwood—Part I • Redundancy: words which repeat the same idea or whose meanings overlap • In this day and time • Repeated again • A true fact • Red in color

  5. Deadwood—Part II • Avoid circumlocution • On an individual basis—individually • Come to some agreement—we agree • Made her decision—decided • Crisis-type situation—a crisis

  6. Circumlocution, cont. • The reason why I’m going to propose is because I love her. • I’m going to propose because I love her. • The land settlement was an example where the Native Americans did not receive fair treatment. • The land settlement was unfair. . . . • Because of the fact that his business failed. . . . • Because his business failed. . . .

  7. Deadwood—Part IIIVerb “To Be” • “To be” verb forms: am; is; are; was; were; being; been; be; were. • There was one student who failed the test. • One student failed the test.

  8. Active vs. Passive Verbs • 1. THE EXAM WAS TAKEN BY THE WHOLE CLASS. • 2. THE ARRANGEMENTS WERE MADE BY ME. • 3. MY DEGREE ONLINE WAS FINISHED ON TIME.

  9. Practice Example • THE PROJECT IS LIKELY TO RESULT IN A MINOR POPULATION INCREASE IN THE CITY FROMFAMILIES RELOCATING TOTHE SITE FROM OUTSIDE THE COMMUNITY.

  10. The Fix • The project may cause a minor population increase in the city.

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