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Optimal Exam Preparation: Rest vs. Intelligence

Ensure adequate rest during exam prep despite intelligence significance. Avoid grammar shifts & wordiness for clearer communication.

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Optimal Exam Preparation: Rest vs. Intelligence

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  1. Exercise 24

  2. No.1 • (Worse) When a student is preparing for an examination, you should get plenty of rest before the test despite the fact that intelligence plays a major role.

  3. (Better 1) When a student is preparing for an examination, he or she should get plenty of rest before the test although intelligence plays a major role.

  4. No.1 (cont.) • (Better 2)A student should get plenty of rest when preparing for an examination despite the fact that intelligence plays a major role.

  5. [Note 7.1] • The writer should avoid shifting from the Third Person to First Person, or vice versa. • The writer should also avoid shifting from First Person to Second Person.

  6. Example • (Original) I will not go to a coffee shop where you can not use the shop’s electrical outlet for your notebook computer. • (Revised) I will not go to a coffee shop where I can not use the shop’s electrical outlet for my notebook computer.

  7. [Note 7.2] • Avoid wordiness by saying although instead of despite the fact that.

  8. No.2 • (Worse) The graduate student recorded the data and then write a summary report. • (Better 1) The graduate student recorded the data and then wrote a summary report.

  9. [Note 7.3] • Shifting verb tense in a sentence is undesirable. • However, a shift in verb tense is acceptable if the writer refers to something that occurred in the past, but then states a fact, finding, observation or assumption based on this previous event.

  10. Example • Tsai and Li [2] examined the factors that influence thermal stability, indicating that temperature plays a prominent role.

  11. No.3 • (Worse) Turn on the machine if conditions are such that a hazard might occur and the valve should be closed. • (Better) Turn on the machine and close the valveif a hazard might occur.

  12. [Note 7.4] • The writer should avoid shifting moods, particularly from imperative (i.e., stating a command) to indicative (i.e., stating a fact or question)

  13. [Note 7.5] • Avoid wordiness by saying if instead of if condition are such that.

  14. No.4 • (Worse)It is noted that the academic advisor asked the graduate student if the paper was completed and is it ready to send to the journal for review. • (Better)Notably, the academic advisor asked the graduate student if the paper was completed and ready to send to the journal for review.

  15. [Note 7.6] • The writer should avoid shifting from indirect course (i.e., reporting what the speaker said) to direct course (i.e., stating the actual words of the speaker), or vice versa.

  16. [Note 7.7] • Omit wordiness by saying Notably, instead of It is noticed that; Otherwise, omit the expression if necessary.

  17. No.5 • (Worse)It is interesting that the laboratory manager arranged the meeting and the discussion was led by him. • (Better)Interestinglythe laboratory manager arranged the meeting and led the discussion.

  18. [Note 7.8] • In this sentence, shifting the subject from laboratory manager to discussion makes the sentence less emphatic and confuses the reader from identifying the important subject.

  19. [Note 7.9] • Avoid wordiness by saying Interestingly instead of It is interesting that; otherwise, omit the expression if unnecessary.

  20. No.6 • (Worse) It is possible that the researcher completes the experiment when you can not obtain any more valid results. • (Better) It is possible that the researcher completes the experiment when he or she can not obtain any more valid results.

  21. [Note 7.10] • Avoid wordiness by saying may, might, could, or can instead of It is possible that.

  22. No.7 • (Worse) The architect gives each program its separate address space and, in doing so, prevented an error that causes one program to fail from interesting with other programs running concurrently. • (Better 1) The architect gives each program its separate address space and, in doing so, prevents an error that causes one program to fail from interesting with other programs running concurrently.

  23. No.7 (cont.) • (Better 2) The architect allots a separate address space for each program to prevent interference with other concurrent programs.

  24. No.8 • (Worse) The consumerrealizes that the trackball is the ideal choice to make when they purchase a user interface of this type. • (Better) The consumer realizes that the trackball is the ideal choice to make when purchasing a user interface of this type.

  25. No.9 • (Worse)Execute the necessary commands provided that they are valid and the program should be reviewed. • (Better)Execute the necessary commands provided that they are valid and review the program.

  26. No.10 • (Worse) The manager instructed the employees to arrange the final details and also is the final program ready to print. • (Better) The manager instructed the employees to arrange the final details and asked if the final program was ready to print.

  27. No.11 • (Worse) The speaker commented on the importance of participating in international events and then the meeting was adjourned by him. • (Better) The speaker commented on the importance of participating in international events and then adjourned the meeting.

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