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Thesis Statements. Hints and Reminders for Comparison Thesis Statements. Always Include ENTIRE prompt!. Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. Thesis begins – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations…
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Thesis Statements Hints and Reminders for Comparison Thesis Statements
Always Include ENTIRE prompt! • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • Thesis begins – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations… • Prompt – Compare The American, French, and Russian revolutions. • Thesis begins – The American, French, and Russian revolutions…
Always Include ENTIRE prompt! • Prompt – Compare the effects of Imperialism on Japan and China in the late 1800s. • Thesis begins – The effects of Imperialism on Japan and China in the late 1800s…
Always Include ENTIRE Prompt! • Prompt – Compare the Dallas Cowboys to one of the following teams: Washington Redskins, New York Giants, or Philadelphia Eagles. • Thesis begins – The Dallas Cowboys and the Washington Redskins… • OR • The Dallas Cowboys and the New York Giants… • OR • The Dallas Cowboys and the Philadelphia Eagles…
No Unnecessary Beginning Phrase • I think (or I believe)… • There are many similarities and differences between… • LEAVE PHRASES SUCH AS THESE OUT OF YOUR THESIS!!
No Evidence in Thesis! • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • Thesis – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was similar because both were developed on rivers. Egypt was located on the Nile and Sumer was between the Tigris and Euphrates. They are also similar because fertile land led to the development of agriculture in both societies. Sumer was located in the Fertile Crescent and the Nile regularly deposited silt, fertilizing Egyptian farmland…
No Evidence in Thesis! • Better Thesis – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was similar because both were developed on rivers and fertile farmland led to the development of agriculture in both societies… • Save evidence for body paragraphs. • Remember, you can’t get credit anywhere else for information in your thesis!
Similarities/Differences must answer Prompt • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • Thesis – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations differed in that they had different religions and governments. Similarities included rivers and social structure.
Similarities/Differences must answer Prompt • Better Thesis – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations differed in that Egypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer, and the Nile’s floods were more beneficial. Similarities included fertile farmland and climate.
Include 4 Different Comparisons! • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • Thesis – The role of geography in Egypt and Sumer was alike because both were located on a river and their rivers flooded. They were different because the Egyptians could predict the flooding unlike the Sumerians, and the floods in Sumer were more destructive. • Save the red for evidence in your body paragraph about rivers.
Include 4 Different Comparisons! • Better Thesis – The role of geographyin Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was alike because they both had fertile farmland and similar climates. They were different because Egypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer, and the Nile’s floods were more beneficial.
Differences Must Compare! • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • Thesis – The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was different because Egypt had more geographic barriers, and Sumer was in the Fertile Crescent. Another difference was Egypt had many natural resources, and Sumer’s floods were destructive…
Differences Must Compare! • Better Thesis -- The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was different because Egypt had more geographic barriers and many natural resources… • OR • The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was different because Egypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer, and Sumer’s floods were more destructive…
Tell When Differences/Similarities Begin! • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • The role of geographyin Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was alike because they both had fertile farmland and similar climates. Egypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer, and the Nile’s floods were more beneficial.
Tell When Differences/Similarities Begin! • Better Thesis – The role of geographyin Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was alike because they both had fertile farmland and similar climates. They were different because Egypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer, and the Nile’s floods were more beneficial.
Only Include TWO Sentences! • Prompt – Compare the role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations. • Thesis -- The role of geographyin Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was alike because they both had fertile farmland. Another similarity was they had similar climates. They were different becauseEgypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer. They were also different because the Nile’s floods were more beneficial.
Only Include TWO Sentences! • Better Thesis -- The role of geographyin Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was alike because they both had fertile farmland and similar climates. They were different because Egypt had more geographic barriers than Sumer, and the Nile’s floods were more beneficial.
Watch Your Verb Tenses! • Ask yourself, is what I’m writing about still happening? • If yes, use present tense (is, are, have). • The Dallas Cowboys and the New York Giants are different because… • If no, use past tense (was, were, had). • The role of geography in Egyptian and Sumerian civilizations was different because… • Keep your tense consistent throughout your essay.
Choose Your Words Carefully! • “In that” means something different than “in which” or “in where.” • They are similar in where both have rivers. • Are we discussing the location of the rivers? • They are similar in which both have rivers. • What does this even mean? • They are similar in that both have rivers. • This is a comparison!! • If this confuses you, use because instead. • They are similar because both have rivers.
Choose Your Words Carefully! • This is formal writing. That means there are certain words/phrases you cannot use. • No contractions. • Do not write, “The Sumerians didn’t have as many natural resources.” • Write, “The Sumerians did not have as many natural resources.” • No slang. • Do not write, “In the Punic Wars, Rome spanked Carthage.” • Write, “In the Punic Wars, Rome defeated Carthage completely.” • No “a lot.” • Use many, much, or another synonym.
PROOFREAD!! • Any words you are copying from the prompt or a document should be spelled correctly. • Make sure all sentences begin with a capital letter and end with a period.
Write Neatly and Legibly!! • The grader makes an immediate judgment about your essay based on your writing. • If you want the grader to start reading with positive feelings about your essay, it needs to be easy to read. • Whether the grader intends it or not, this can affect your score. • Five AP graders at my conference confirmed this.