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Word Choice in Terms of Style, Tone, and Clarity. Tutorial #1: Delete Redundant Material. Redundant material includes words or phrases that repeat ideas in the sentence. The Rule: Delete redundant Words and Phrases. Avoid wordiness. Explanation of Skill.
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Tutorial #1: Delete Redundant Material • Redundant material includes words or phrases that repeat ideas in the sentence. • The Rule: Delete redundant Words and Phrases. Avoid wordiness.
Explanation of Skill • Redundant Phrase: Mary was alarmingly startled by the lightening strike. • Concise Sentence: Mary was startled by the lightening strike.
Redundant Pairs • Terrible tragedy • Past history • Each individual • Final outcome • Past memories • True facts
Redundant Categories • (large) in size • (heavy) in weight • (period) in time • (tall) in height
Abbreviation Categories • AIDS syndrome • PIN number • ATM machine • CD disk • AM morning • PM afternoon
Incorrect: • The football player suffered a harmful injury during the game. • Tom stood in his backyard behind his house.
Correct: • The football player suffered and injury during the game. • Tom stood in his backyard.
Obvious Redundancy • Sally went to the store. At the store, she bought candy, and then she left the store. • Can be changed to: • Sally went to the store, bought candy, and left.
Subtle Redundancy • Suzanne wrote a very unique story. • Can be changed to: • Suzanne wrote a unique story.