DIALOGUE

1. DIALOGUE Dialogue should be brief. It should show the relationships among people How you talk to one another, helps the listener (reader) understand your relationship It should not repeat what the paragraph is saying EX of what NOT to DO: It was a hot rainy day. “It’s hot!” said Kelley. It should keep the story moving forward.

2. format “You have created a monster!” cried Sheila. “ Yes, but I have awoken science!” OR “You have created a monster!” cried Sheila. Ronald muttered in response, “Yes, but I have awoken science.”

3. Freytag’s Pyramid

4. Freytags Pyramid 1. Exposition: setting the scene. The writer introduces the characters and setting, providing description and background. 2. Inciting Incident: something happens to begin the action. A single event usually signals the beginning of the main conflict. 3. Rising Action: the story builds and gets more exciting. 4. Climax: the moment of greatest tension in a story. This is often the most exciting event.

5. Continued…Freytag’s Pyrmaid 5. Falling Action: events happen as a result of the climax and we know that the story will soon end. 6. Resolution: the character solves the main problem/conflict or someone solves it for him or her. 7. Dénouement: the ending. At this point, any remaining secrets, questions or mysteries which remain after the resolution are solved by the characters or explained by the author.

6. Narrative Leads The Narrative Hook- The reader is driven to keep reading because the writer begins with an unexpected part of the story (the complication instead of the exposition). adds curiousity and makes him want to keep reading. Ex: There was blood everywhere when he awoke. Ex: It was the year 2081, and everyone was finally equal, or almost equal.

7. Narrative Leads Scene Setting: The writer uses vivid descriptive detail that appeals to multiple senses and begins with the setting It was unusually bright that night outside of Monique’s small bedroom window in Choisi-le Roi, just outside of Paris. The moon was so radiant, it seemed almost festive. As Monique gazed up at it, she thought that the moon must not know that her village was occupied byNazi troops. From The Butterfly by Patricia Polacco

8. Leads Telling Detail… The writer begins with detail (a fact) that reveals a writer’s focus or attitude. Ex:There on the pavement was a small child’s tennis shoe.

9. Leads Character Throwing: The writer jumps right into describing a major or minor character to call attention to that character. Ex:Teddy Howland was the skinniest, ugliest kid in Eureka.

10. … Leads Walking: The writer seems to “beat around the bush” instead of getting right to the point; the subject of the paper isn’t apparent at first. Ex:Giving credit where credit is due, if it hadn’t been for my mother, I would have never gotten him in the first place, mainly because my father doesn’t like dogs. (this will be about getting a dog)

11. …Leads Anecdote/Analogy: The writer begins with a brief story that will be the focus of the narrative. This is a “story within a story.”

12. Narrative Closings Circle: End where you begin by connecting the beginning with the end. The end states or hints to something stated or suggested at the beginning and often uses the same key words. Example of story beginning-Sometimes in life, a person will realize that the grass is not always greener, and that getting everything you think you always wanted may not be as great as you had once thought. Example of same story ending: Even though she married the man she had hoped, all that she had once believed to be true about him was not as it had once seemed. She realized that the grass had not been greener.

13. Narrative Closing Ah ha! - This is a theme or message that the writer shares with readers. Sadder but wiser, or “gee, look what I learned.” Ex:I look at the dark sky closing in, sky getting more and more purple, and I’m thinking how nothing is as simple as you guess—not right or wrong, not Judd Travers, not even me or this dog I got here. But the good part is I saved Shiloh and opened my eyes some. Now that ain’t bad for eleven. From Shiloh by Phyllis Reynolds Naylor

14. Narrative Closing Surprise: The strange twist at the end. The twist must tie to the plot and characters, something that might happen or that could happen. Ex: But Richards was too late. When the doctors came they said she had died of heart disease --of the joy that kills. From “The Story of an Hour” by Kate Chopin

15. Show Don’t Tell • “Telling Sentences”: • Do not leave a sensory image • Do leave questions in the reader’s mind • Tend to contain be verbs (am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been) • “Showing Sentences”: • Do leave a sensory image • Do appeal to multiple senses • Do not leave unanswered questions • Contain strong verbs

16. Show Don’t Tell Chugging on the unleaded coffee in my travel cup, I stare at the road through tired eyes, thinking about the long line at the copy machine that I will face because of the turtle in front of me who apparently doesn’t need to worry about deadlines and schedules. My headlights illuminate the neon orange traffic cones lining the side of this bumper to bumper two-lane road, but the blanket of fog makes the dark road even darker. Suddenly the taillights of the turtle in front of me glare right in front of my eyes. My tires squeal and I smell burning rubber as I slam my foot on the brake pedal, but it is too late; the combination of the slick film of oil and water covering the asphalt and my tendency to ride the back bumper

17. Show Don’t Tell • Who? I was shocked and scared; my hands were shaking as I clenched the steering wheel; my mouth dropped open in astonishment and surprise • What? The impact—tired squealed and a heavy thump reverberated from my front bumper, along the hood of the car, into my hands as they clutched the steering wheel, and into my chest • Where? Crowded, busy 2-lane road, heavy construction, orange traffic cones line the side of the road • When? Dark, foggy, damp morning, slick film of oil and water covering asphalt • How? Riding the back bumper of the car in front of me, trying to keep anyone from sneaking in line and hoping that I could push the slow car in front of me faster • Why? Chugging on unleaded coffee in my travel cup hadn’t awakened me yet; I need to get in line to make copies