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Essay revision practice

Essay revision practice. NOT PARALLEL: After I graduate from high school, I plan to go to college, career, and family. The Joy Luck Club reveals that parents and children have conflicts about expectations, communication, and the parents try to control their children. PARALLEL:

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Essay revision practice

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  1. Essay revision practice

  2. NOT PARALLEL: After I graduate from high school, I plan to go to college, career, and family. The Joy Luck Club reveals that parents and children have conflicts about expectations, communication, and the parents try to control their children. PARALLEL: After I graduate from high school, I plan to go to college, get a job, and start a family. The Joy Luck Club reveals parents and children have conflicts about parents’ unrealistic expectations, poor communication, and unwanted interference. Parallel Structure

  3. Transitions (TR) Parents in the JLC have extremely high expectations for their children. As Jing-Mei looks at her reflection, she is displeased with her compliant mentality, and resolves, “I won’t let her change me…I won’t be what I’m not” (144). June resents her mother’s lofty dreams, because she is satisfied with her accomplishments. She wants to pursue her own dreams, not her mother’s. Lindo, Waverly’s mother, pushes her to compete in a chess tournament. When Waverly suggests that she will bring shame to her family if she loses, Lindo replies, “Is shame you fall down nobody push you” (98). Rather than encouraging her daughter to attempt a new challenge, Lindo accuses her of cowardice.

  4. Transitions (TR) Parents in the JLC have extremely high expectations for their children. As Jing-Mei looks at her reflection, she is displeased with her compliant mentality, and resolves, “I won’t let her change me…I won’t be what I’m not” (144). June resents her mother’s lofty dreams, because she is satisfied with her accomplishments. She wants to pursue her own dreams, not her mother’s. June’s friend Waverly has a similarly demanding mother. Lindo, Waverly’s mother, pushes her to compete in a chess tournament. When Waverly suggests that she will bring shame to her family if she loses, Lindo replies, “Is shame you fall down nobody push you” (98). Rather than encouraging her daughter to attempt a new challenge, Lindo accuses her of cowardice.

  5. June’s mom wants her to be really good. Ying-Ying doesn’t really say what she means. Lindo tries to tell Waverly how to play chess. June’s mom desires for June to be exceptional, not just adequate. Ying-Ying fails to directly state her meaning. Lindo attempts to direct Waverly’s every move. Poor Word Choice (PWC)

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