Revising Your WIAF Poem

1. Revising Your WIAF Poem (1) Adding Detail and (2) Using Line Breaks

2. Some detailed lines • I am from collecting binders to bouncy balls, bouncy balls to key chains, key chains to books, and books to teddy bears • I’m from late night sleepovers, just waiting for them to fall asleep before I can prank them • I’m from head banging rock and roll

3. Some detailed lines • I’m from travelling in the high sky looking at the clouds in a plane. It’s so high that the houses look like blocks • Gulp Gulp Gulp the sound of me drinking my delicious strawberry orange smoothie • Going on a trip in the summer and getting huge, pinkish-red, mosquito bites

4. Some lines that need detail • Answering my family when they call me by one of my many nicknames • C’mon! Include a few nicknames. We’re all dying to know what they are!

5. Some lines that need detail • I’m from staying up all night at sleepover parties • What sort of things do you do at the sleepovers?

6. Some lines that need detail • I am from staying inside on rainy days reading my favourite books • List a few of your favourite books

7. Adding line breaks • Deciding where and how to create line breaks is a challengingaspect of writing poetry

8. Tips for adding line breaks • Line breaks serve 2 main purposes: • Separate ideas • Emphasize words

9. Tips for adding line breaks • Separate ideas • I’m from late night sleepovers, • just waiting for them to fall asleep • before I can prank them

10. Tips for adding line breaks • Separate ideas • Gulp, • Gulp, • Gulp • the sound of • me drinking my delicious strawberry orange smoothie

11. Tips for adding line breaks • Emphasize words • I’m from clothes on the ground • shoes all over the place • unmade bed • drawers open • messy room = parent mad

12. Tips for adding line breaks • Emphasize words • I am from collecting binders to bouncy balls, bouncy balls to key chains, key chains to books, and books to teddy bears