Learning Objectives Language features of effective writing Editing and improving description

1. Using personification effectively in writing Learning Objectives • Language features of effective writing • Editing and improving description • How to personify effectively Lesson Two

2. Frankenstein Must Be ………………….. The ……………….of Frankenstein The ……….. of Frankenstein I Was ………….………………… Frankenstein ………. …………… Frankenstein and …………………… ……………. From Hell The ……………… of Frankenstein Frankenstein Must Be Destroyed The Curse of Frankenstein The Evil of Frankenstein I Was A Teenage Frankenstein Frankenstein Created A Woman Frankenstein and The Monster From Hell The Bride of Frankenstein Starter: Fill the Gaps and Guess the Film Names

3. Personification What is being described? The Monster crawled through the winding streets groaning as it chugged uphill. Its yellow eyes dimly peered out of the driving rain and he slowly turned to face the oncoming traffic. Its heart began to falter and he screeched to a halt My Car! What then is personification? Write a definition in your books.

4. Personification What is being described? The Monstercrawled through the winding streets groaning as it chugged uphill. Its yellow eyes dimly peered out of the driving rain and he slowly turned to face the oncoming traffic. Its heart began to falter and he screeched to a halt. What is being described? The Monster crawled through the winding streets groaning as it chugged uphill. Its yellow eyes dimly peered out of the driving rain and he slowly turned to face the oncoming traffic. Its heart began to falter and he screeched to a halt

5. Personification Personification is giving an object or a place human characteristics. This can be done in a number of ways. How is the car personified? Name The Monstercrawled through the winding streets groaning as it chugged uphill. Its yellow eyes dimly peered out of the driving rain and he slowly turned to face the oncoming traffic. His heart began to falter and he screeched to a halt. Gender Body Parts Verbs – Movement and Actions

6. Read ‘The Mist’ Examples. Highlight where personification takes place. Click on the word to check the personification, and then click on the personification to move on. Look for and annotate : • Actions/Verbs • Body Parts • Name • Gender • Feelings

7. The Mist The mist was back, settling in the streets as if she had never left, laying her damp touch upon the stones, her foggy fingers outstretched. The moon, directly above, was hidden behind his own cloud, and had disappeared from view. London was anxious tonight, waiting for the dawn, hoping that the things that crept undercover of the mist would have disappeared by then. Click on key words that show a type of personification the type of personification appears

8. The Mist Gender The mist was back, settling in the streets as if she had never left, laying her damp touch upon the stones, her foggy fingers outstretched. The moon, directly above, was hidden behind his own cloud, and had disappeared from view. London was anxious tonight, waiting for the dawn, hoping that the things that crept undercover of the mist would have disappeared by then.

9. The Mist Feelings The mist was back, settling in the streets as if she had never left, laying her damp touch upon the stones, her foggy fingers outstretched. The moon, directly above, was hidden behind his own cloud, and had disappeared from view. London was anxious tonight, waiting for the dawn, hoping that the things that crept undercover of the mist would have disappeared by then.

10. The Mist Action The mist was back, settling in the streets as if she had never left, laying her damp touch upon the stones, her foggy fingers outstretched. The moon, directly above, was hidden behind his own cloud, and had disappeared from view. London was anxious tonight, waiting for the dawn, hoping that the things that crept undercover of the mist would have disappeared by then.

11. The Mist Body part The mist was back, settling in the streets as if she had never left, laying her damp touch upon the stones, her foggy fingers outstretched. The moon, directly above, was hidden behind his own cloud, and had disappeared from view. London was anxious tonight, waiting for the dawn, hoping that the things that crept undercover of the mist would have disappeared by then.

12. Individual Description Choose one of the following pictures and titles and write your own piece of personification Remember your targets from last time!

13. http://www.flickr.com/photos/sheffield_tiger/2727778707/ http://www.flickr.com/photos/rsvstks/19428230/ http://www.flickr.com/photos/camshafter/2514992069/ http://www.flickr.com/photos/london/92660969/ Titles to Choose from: The Ghost Ship, The Fire, The Storm, The Ruin,

14. Plenary Swap with critical friend. Peer assess your partner’s work. Tick each time personification has successfully been used. Comment on how well they have used personification and how they might improve the piece. Share good practice with classmates Remember to Tick for: • Actions/Verbs • Body Parts • Name • Gender