Warm-Up 2/10/2014

1. Warm-Up 2/10/2014 • Find your writing goals sheet in your binder • Take out your song analysis draft • Get a green, blue, pink, and yellow highlighter from the bins up front. You may need to share blue highlighters at your table.

2. Song Analysis Essay Self-Review

3. Writing Goal • Write your goal at the top of your Song Analysis draft • You will be responsible for telling me how you worked on this goal in this essay. You should be prepared to do this. • You will need to indicate specifically where in the essay you made these improvements.

4. Formatting • Times New Roman • 12 point font • Left alignment (NOT centered) • 1 inch margins

5. Header • Name • Teacher Name • Class • Date • Day, Month, Year Clark Sample Ms. Vaerewyck English 12 10 February 2014

6. Labeling • Make a key at the top of your paper using your highlighters • Sample: • Blue=Statement • Pink=Proof • Yellow=Commentary • Green= Green Words in the thesis • Label the topic sentences at the beginning of each section • Label the transitions at the end of each section • Highlight the body paragraphs for statement, proof, and commentary using your key

7. Eyeballing Percentages • Look at what you highlighted. Is more than 15-20% of what you wrote pink? • You need to shorten quotes, develop commentary, or both. • Write which one(s) you think you need to do • If quotes are too long, cross out the part(s) of the quotes you think you don’t need • Remember: you may only use 6 lines, max, from each song

8. Claim Check Must make a claim about how that song: If it looks like this, they do not have a claim: made an impact on you truly reflects who you are or some aspect of your being holds a special meaning for you in some way “On Your Porch” really impacted how I’ve lived my life. “On Your Porch” reflects who I am. “On Your Porch” is the most meaningful song to me for a number of reasons.

9. Commentary Check Should: Should Not: Explain what the chosen lyrics mean to you Connect the song to you through concrete (specific) examples from your life Prove your thesis and green words Focus on anything other than yourself or your life Be vague and lack detail

10. Thesis Statement • Highlight green words in green • Check that they are “green” and NOUNS • Check thesis against claims made in the essay. • Does it match or does it contradict what you say about your song(s)? • Make sure it isn’t three-prong • Shouldn’t just list green words • Write yourself some notes now. You may take out your green words list if you need it. Example: • “On Your Porch” speaks to the bravery it takes to have compassion for myself, and the solitude I have sometimes faced in search of hope for a better future.

11. Check the Introduction’s Grabber • Does you have one? • Is it effective? • Did you use a random quote that may seems out of place? • If you start off with a question, does it work or does it seem out of place or unrelated?

12. Sample Intro: The first time I saw The Format in concert was at Edgefest 2004. After a long, sun-baked day of endless bands, the sky had darkened to the dirty blue of all rainclouds. It threatened all the electrical equipment of the stage and sound controls, and yet the last band refused to give up taking the stage. Nate, Sam, and the other “Formatters” came up, and the crowd, now dotted with rain sprinkles, grew louder and louder until Nate took the microphone. When he announced the show would go on, the crowd erupted in approval. There is nothing quite like a Format crowd. We sang along to both fast and slow songs, and as we sang a shared camaraderie built between crowd members, the band, and the rain that turns to sheets and blinded us all. We left that night running through the rain, soaked and thrilled with the performance, racing through the parking lot to my car to recount, time and again, that last, wondrous performance. Since then my love of the band only grew, and with each album Nate Ruess (now the lead singer of Fun.) writes, I feel that he has written the soundtrack to my life. The song that defined my senior year of high school was The Format’s “On Your Porch.” To me, “On Your Porch” speaks to the bravery it takes to have compassion for myself, and the solitude I have sometimes faced in search of hope for a better future.

13. Mechanics Check The moment you’ve all been waiting for! Check for: • Comma usage • Plural vs. Possessive (One Republic’s vs. One Republics) • Capitalization of proper nouns • Run-on sentences and sentence fragments • Spelling • Word choice that isn’t quite right • Anything else you see Even if you aren’t sure, mark it. You know when something doesn’t look or sound quite right. You will double-check later

14. Language Register Check • Are you staying in formal register? Look back at notes to check. • Use a pen or a pencil to circle any register drops and write “register” next to these circled areas. • You may use personal pronouns like “I,” “me,” and “my.” • Absolutely no “you” or “your” unless it is in one of the lyrics you are using.

15. Citations • Name of the band and line number(s) • (The Format 30-32) • Last name of artist and line number(s) • (Paisley, 30-32) • If the artist has only one name, like Madonna: • (Madonna, 30-32) • Change citations now (if needed)

16. On Wednesday: • Final copy • This workshopped draft • Approved song lyrics • Turnitin.com receipt. • Even if you are not here, it is due. You will need to make arrangements to have it to me by the beginning of your class period. • If you are missing your turnitin.com receipt, it is considered late, even if you have everything else with you.

17. Reminder About Grading Scale • Look at Grading Addendum (should be with your syllabus)