Evaluating Your Paragraphs

1. Evaluating Your Paragraphs What makes a good paragraph? What should I pay attention to?

2. Your Essay: An Overview Introduction (Thesis is at the end!) Body Paragraph #1 Body Paragraph #2 Body Paragraph #3 Conclusion

3. Each Body Paragraph Topic Sentence Context Quotation Analysis Transition Context Quotation Analysis Summative Concluding Sentence

4. Topic Sentences Is your topic sentence a claim (an opinion) or is it a fact? It should be a claim!! And does it have a So what?

5. Claim or Fact? As the book progresses, Jack changes from a boy into a savage.

6. Claim or Fact? Jack is becoming a savage attacker due to the lack of connection between the boys and society.

7. Claim or Fact? Jack and Ralph both have leadership qualities.

8. Claim or Fact? Jack feels as if Ralph is not doing a good job of leading and wants to take his place as chief.

9. Even though Ralph is the “chief” of the group, Simon also possesses some leadership qualities that unintentionally help the group. Throughout the book, Simon has always been nice to everyone, especially Piggy. This was evident when Jack got mad at Piggy for saying all Jack wanted to do was hunt. Jack pushed him to the ground and his glasses flew off his face. “He went crouching and feeling over the rocks but Simon, who got there first, found them for him” (65). Simon repeats these acts of kindness (like when he helps the little kids reach fruit on a small tree) throughout the fourth chapter and it shows that he has the ability to care for people which is an important quality for a leader to have. It is also important for someone on the island to be caring and treat people equally, like Simon does, because he helps to maintain and balance fairness for everyone on the island. He has a skill that most people can’t just learn, and that neither Jack or Ralph has. He also shows the quality of being able to comfort and calm people. While everyone (except Piggy and the littluns) are hunting for pigs, Ralph starts to worry about getting off the island and if he will ever return home. “’I just think you’ll get back all right.’ For a moment nothing more was said. And then they suddenly smiled at each other” (103). This shows his ability to comfort Ralph, calm him down, and that he is naturally likeable. These are very helpful qualities for Simon to have, especially on an island where everyone is worried about getting off, because he demonstrates calmness and can convince anyone that they will be fine. It is important to be likeable so that everyone will get along since there are only a small group of people and they need to keep fighting at a minimum. Nobody realizes how much Simon’s leadership qualities help the group but since he is able to be nice to everyone and comfort people, he is helps them be able to cope with being on an island and figure out how to get off.

10. Topic Sentence Is it arguable? Does it answer the So What? Even though Ralph is the “chief” of the group, Simon also possesses some leadership qualities that unintentionally help the group. Throughout the book, Simon has always been nice to everyone, especially Piggy. This was evident when Jack got mad at Piggy for saying all Jack wanted to do was hunt. Jack pushed him to the ground and his glasses flew off his face. “He went crouching and feeling over the rocks but Simon, who got there first, found them for him" (65). Simon repeats these acts of kindness (like when he helps the little kids reach fruit on a small tree) throughout the fourth chapter and it shows that he has the ability to care for people which is an important quality for a leader to have. It is also important for someone on the island to be caring and treat people equally, like Simon does, because he helps to maintain and balance fairness for everyone on the island. He has a skill that most people can’t just learn, and that neither Jack or Ralph has. He also shows the quality of being able to comfort and calm people. While everyone (except Piggy and the littluns) are hunting for pigs, Ralph starts to worry about getting off the island and if he will ever return home. “’I just think you’ll get back all right.’ For a moment nothing more was said. And then they suddenly smiled at each other" (103). This shows his ability to comfort Ralph, calm him down, and that he is naturally likeable. These are very helpful qualities for Simon to have, especially on an island where everyone is worried about getting off, because he demonstrates calmness and can convince anyone that they will be fine. It is important to be likeable so that everyone will get along since there are only a small group of people and they need to keep fighting at a minimum. Nobody realizes how much Simon’s leadership qualities help the group but since he is able to be nice to everyone and comfort people, he is helps them be able to cope with being on an island and figure out how to get off.

11. Even though Ralph is the “chief” of the group, Simon also possesses some leadership qualities that unintentionally help the group. Throughout the book, Simon has always been nice to everyone, especially Piggy. This was evident when Jack got mad at Piggy for saying all Jack wanted to do was hunt. Jack pushed him to the ground and his glasses flew off his face. “He went crouching and feeling over the rocks but Simon, who got there first, found them for him" (65). Simon repeats these acts of kindness (like when he helps the little kids reach fruit on a small tree) throughout the fourth chapter and it shows that he has the ability to care for people which is an important quality for a leader to have. It is also important for someone on the island to be caring and treat people equally, like Simon does, because he helps to maintain and balance fairness for everyone on the island. He has a skill that most people can’t just learn, and that neither Jack or Ralph has. He also shows the quality of being able to comfort and calm people. While everyone (except Piggy and the littluns) are hunting for pigs, Ralph starts to worry about getting off the island and if he will ever return home. “’I just think you’ll get back all right.’ For a moment nothing more was said. And then they suddenly smiled at each other" (103). This shows his ability to comfort Ralph, calm him down, and that he is naturally likeable. These are very helpful qualities for Simon to have, especially on an island where everyone is worried about getting off, because he demonstrates calmness and can convince anyone that they will be fine. It is important to be likeable so that everyone will get along since there are only a small group of people and they need to keep fighting at a minimum. Nobody realizes how much Simon’s leadership qualities help the group but since he is able to be nice to everyone and comfort people, he is helps them be able to cope with being on an island and figure out how to get off. Context Give background information so your reader understands next quotation May come before or after

12. Even though Ralph is the “chief” of the group, Simon also possesses some leadership qualities that unintentionally help the group. Throughout the book, Simon has always been nice to everyone, especially Piggy. This was evident when Jack got mad at Piggy for saying all Jack wanted to do was hunt. Jack pushed him to the ground and his glasses flew off his face. “He went crouching and feeling over the rocks but Simon, who got there first, found them for him" (65). Simon repeats these acts of kindness (like when he helps the little kids reach fruit on a small tree) throughout the fourth chapter and it shows that he has the ability to care for people which is an important quality for a leader to have. It is also important for someone on the island to be caring and treat people equally, like Simon does, because he helps to maintain and balance fairness for everyone on the island. He has a skill that most people can’t just learn, and that neither Jack or Ralph has. He also shows the quality of being able to comfort and calm people. While everyone (except Piggy and the littluns) are hunting for pigs, Ralph starts to worry about getting off the island and if he will ever return home. “’I just think you’ll get back all right.’ For a moment nothing more was said. And then they suddenly smiled at each other" (103).This shows his ability to comfort Ralph, calm him down, and that he is naturally likeable. These are very helpful qualities for Simon to have, especially on an island where everyone is worried about getting off, because he demonstrates calmness and can convince anyone that they will be fine. It is important to be likeable so that everyone will get along since there are only a small group of people and they need to keep fighting at a minimum. Nobody realizes how much Simon’s leadership qualities help the group but since he is able to be nice to everyone and comfort people, he is helps them be able to cope with being on an island and figure out how to get off. Evidence Don’t forget the page number! YES (65) NO (page 65) Use evidence to highlight different aspects of your argument

13. Even though Ralph is the “chief” of the group, Simon also possesses some leadership qualities that unintentionally help the group. Throughout the book, Simon has always been nice to everyone, especially Piggy. This was evident when Jack got mad at Piggy for saying all Jack wanted to do was hunt. Jack pushed him to the ground and his glasses flew off his face. “He went crouching and feeling over the rocks but Simon, who got there first, found them for him" (65). Simon repeats these acts of kindness (like when he helps the little kids reach fruit on a small tree) throughout the fourth chapter and it shows that he has the ability to care for people which is an important quality for a leader to have. It is also important for someone on the island to be caring and treat people equally, like Simon does, because he helps to maintain and balance fairness for everyone on the island. He has a skill that most people can’t just learn, and that neither Jack or Ralph has.He also shows the quality of being able to comfort and calm people. While everyone (except Piggy and the littluns) are hunting for pigs, Ralph starts to worry about getting off the island and if he will ever return home. “’I just think you’ll get back all right.’ For a moment nothing more was said. And then they suddenly smiled at each other" (103).This shows his ability to comfort Ralph, calm him down, and that he is naturally likeable. These are very helpful qualities for Simon to have, especially on an island where everyone is worried about getting off, because he demonstrates calmness and can convince anyone that they will be fine. It is important to be likeable so that everyone will get along since there are only a small group of people and they need to keep fighting at a minimum. Nobody realizes how much Simon’s leadership qualities help the group but since he is able to be nice to everyone and comfort people, he is helps them be able to cope with being on an island and figure out how to get off. Analysis 2-4 sentences Consistent focus throughout paragraph

14. Even though Ralph is the “chief” of the group, Simon also possesses some leadership qualities that unintentionally help the group. Throughout the book, Simon has always been nice to everyone, especially Piggy. This was evident when Jack got mad at Piggy for saying all Jack wanted to do was hunt. Jack pushed him to the ground and his glasses flew off his face. “He went crouching and feeling over the rocks but Simon, who got there first, found them for him" (65). Simon repeats these acts of kindness (like when he helps the little kids reach fruit on a small tree) throughout the fourth chapter and it shows that he has the ability to care for people which is an important quality for a leader to have. It is also important for someone on the island to be caring and treat people equally, like Simon does, because he helps to maintain and balance fairness for everyone on the island. He has a skill that most people can’t just learn, and that neither Jack or Ralph has.He also shows the quality of being able to comfort and calm people. While everyone (except Piggy and the littluns) are hunting for pigs, Ralph starts to worry about getting off the island and if he will ever return home. “’I just think you’ll get back all right.’ For a moment nothing more was said. And then they suddenly smiled at each other" (103).This shows his ability to comfort Ralph, calm him down, and that he is naturally likeable. These are very helpful qualities for Simon to have, especially on an island where everyone is worried about getting off, because he demonstrates calmness and can convince anyone that they will be fine. It is important to be likeable so that everyone will get along since there are only a small group of people and they need to keep fighting at a minimum. Nobody realizes how much Simon’s leadership qualities help the group but since he is able to be nice to everyone and comfort people, he is helps them be able to cope with being on an island and figure out how to get off. Transitions Between each evidence/analysis, include a transition Also… Another example of… Similarly… Summary Analysis Reconnect with your topic sentence’s main argument