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Bell Ringer 10/29/2013. Get out your rough draft and a pen or pencil Clear everything else off of your desk. Editing. Spooky Paragraph.
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Bell Ringer 10/29/2013 • Get out your rough draft and a pen or pencil • Clear everything else off of your desk
Editing Spooky Paragraph
Crimson light poured through the cracks of the wood planked barn. However, the air inside the broken down barn was still. The sweet smell of oats left the barn years ago. Right after the accident, I would come to the barn when I wanted to get away from the well wishers who came to the house like cockroaches. Dad wanted to bulldoze it, but he could never find the courage to do it. I hadn’t been back since I moved out. I watched every step as I crawled through the barn. It was like a museum that had been deserted. I could hear rats scurry as I neared the ladder to the loft. I remembered the loft being a lot higher, but now, if I wasn’t careful, I would bump my forehead on its edge. The whole thing replayed in my mind like a bad movie. I could see my sister, but I couldn’t warn her. My hands turned to ice as I climbed the wooden ladder. I crawled up into the loft. No one had been where I currently stood since the accident. A piece of her purple dress clung to a nail head on the floor. The edges of the fabric were reddish brown. As my trembling hand reached for the torn fabric, an icy wind raced up my back sending needles into my spine. I put my hand back on the ladder rung. “Is someone there?” I called out.
Crimson However The sweet Right Dad I I It I I The whole I My I No The Edges As I Is
Please read the following paragraph BACKWARDS • Aoccdrnig to rseerach at CmabrigdeUinervtisy, it deosn'tmttaer in wahtoredr the ltteers in a wrod are, the olnyiprmoatnttihng is taht the frist and lsatltteer be at the rghitpclae. The rset can be a total mses and you can sitllraed it wouthitporbelm. Tihs is bcuseae the huamnmniddeos not raederveylteter by istlef, but the wrod as a wlohe. Amzanig huh? PS: Hwo'dyuolkie to run tihs by yuorsepllckehcer?
Please read the following paragraph • Aoccdrnig to rseerach at CmabrigdeUinervtisy, it deosn'tmttaer in wahtoredr the ltteers in a wrod are, the olnyiprmoatnttihng is taht the frist and lsatltteer be at the rghitpclae. The rset can be a total mses and you can sitllraed it wouthitporbelm. Tihs is bcuseae the huamnmniddeos not raederveylteter by istlef, but the wrod as a wlohe. Amzanig huh? PS: Hwo'dyuolkie to run tihs by yuorsepllckehcer?
Crimson However The sweet Right Dad I I It I I The whole I My I No The Edges As I Is
Crimson However The sweet Right Dad I I It I I The whole I My I No The Edges As I Is
Editing To Do List: • First words – fix words used multiple times • Spelling – DONE • Sentence length – looks good • Boring words – replace boxed words • 8th grader or Caveman – AFTER corrections above are made, reread it all together to make sure it sounds like an 8th grader not a caveman
Crimson However The sweet Right Dad I I It I I The whole I My I No The Edges As I Is