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Exercise 18

Exercise 18. No.1. (Worse) To keep in shape, exercise is a must for an athlete. (Better) An athlete must exercise to keep in shape. No.2. (Worse) When an engineer, customer satisfaction should be attempted. (Better) An engineer should attempt to satisfy the customer. No.3.

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Exercise 18

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  1. Exercise 18

  2. No.1 • (Worse) To keep in shape, exercise is a must for an athlete. • (Better) An athlete must exercise to keep in shape.

  3. No.2 • (Worse) When an engineer, customer satisfaction should be attempted. • (Better) An engineer should attempt to satisfy the customer.

  4. No.3 • (Worse) After simulating a real environment, a consensus was reached. • (Better) After the researchers simulated a real environment, a consensus was reached.

  5. No.4 • (Worse) Being radioactive, the technician handled the materials with extreme care. • (Better) The technician handled the radioactive materials with extreme care.

  6. No.5 • (Worse) Several investigations calibrated errors related to camera distortion, which occurred in the 1990’s. • (Better) Several investigations during the 1990’s calibrated errors related to camera distortion.

  7. No.6 • (Worse) The pedestrian warned the passing car with an angry look. • (Better) The pedestrian with an angry look warned the passing car.

  8. [Note 5.5] • It is illogical to state that the passing car has an angry look. • The revised sentence eliminates the confusion.

  9. No.7 • (Worse) The cellular manufacturing system has been increasingly applied to industry, which is an important group technology application. • (Better) The cellular manufacturing system, an important group technology application, has been increasingly applied to industry.

  10. No.8 • (Worse) A genetic algorithm is appropriate for the machine-component grouping problem which is a robust adaptive optimization method based on principles of natural evolution. • (Better) Genetic algorithm, a robust adaptive optimization method based on principles of natural evolution, is appropriate for the machine-component grouping problem.

  11. [Note 5.6] • In this sentence, a robust adaptive optimization method illogically refers to the machine-component grouping problem, implying that the modifying clause has been misplaced. • The revised sentence places the clause next to subject that it modifies.

  12. No.9 • (Worse) To encourage adult literacy, public reading rooms have been established in the city. • (Better 1) To encourage adult literacy, the government has established public reading rooms in the city. • (Better 2) The government has established public reading rooms in the city to encourage adult literacy.

  13. No.10 • (Worse) When logging onto the Internet, complicated programming tasks are unnecessary. • (Better 1) Complicated programming tasks are unnecessary when logging onto the Internet. • (Better 2) Logging onto the Internet does not require complicated programming tasks.

  14. No.11 • (Worse) As a child, my mother encouraged me to read many books. • (Better) My mother encouraged me to read many books when I was a child.

  15. No.12 • (Worse) Entering the apartment, the light had been left on. • (Better) Entering the apartment, I notice that the light had been left on.

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