How can we make a higher mark in writing?

1. How can we make a higher mark in writing?

2. Learn to evaluate your writing Basic hints: Contents: covering all the required points language: narrating properly and clearly

3. 如何写出高分数的书面表达 • 　高考书面表达的要求 １．词语正确、连贯、流畅 ２．语句简洁、用词恰当，能根据不同的情景选用不同 　　的词语和句子 ３．句子结构有变化 ４．语言整体性、逻辑性强 ５．标点符号准确无误 6.包含所有要点 7.严格按要求写作 三. 书写书面表达的过程 审题－构思－草稿－修改－抄写在卷子上

4. 四　构思书面表达的注意事项 • １．一审　即审题 • 　　二扣　即紧扣要点　紧扣主题 • 　　三避　即避写感想　避写心得　避写体会 • 　　四性　即准确性　简洁性　连贯性　表达方 • 式多样性 • 　２．连接词的选用 • (1) 表示递进：and 、and then、 also 、besides、 in addition、and moreover、 what’s more 、what was worse

5. (2)表示转折：but、 however、 although、on the contrary、 otherwise • (3) 表示结果：so 、therefore、as a result • (4)表示时间：now、 then、 afterwards、 later • Soon、 before long 、after that、 shortly after that • up to now 、 just now 、just then 、 so far . • ３.十大复杂句型： • (1)定语从句　　(2)强调句　　(3)倒装 • (4) 被动结构 (5)虚拟语气 (6)so…..that

6. Five levels of narration: 25 1. determine its level at the beginning (0,1-5) failed. (6-10) poor. (11-15) fit (16-20) good (21-25) perfect 2. deduct 2 if written in less than 80 or more than 120 words

7. 3. Scoring points: a. required points or details (not a single point missing) b. words and expressions (proper and voluble) c. grammatical structures (correct and number) d. context (coherent and consistent)

8. Level 5: perfect (21-25)Completely fulfilled the task of writing： 1. cover all the required points 2. apply more grammatical structures and advanced vocabulary 3. contain no grammatical and spelling errors (if any, resulting from attempts of complex structures or more advanced vocabulary.) 4. show strong competence in using language 5. effectively apply linking words, thus compact

9. Level 4: good (15-20)Completely fulfilled the task of writing 1. cover all the key points, missing one or two secondary points 2. grammatical structures and vocabulary meet the needs of writing. 3. Very few grammatical and spelling errors resulting from attempts of complex structures 4. apply some simple linking words, making its context compact

10. Level 3: fit (10-15)Basically fulfilled the task of writing： 1. cover all the main points, missing some points of less importance. 2. grammatical structures and vocabulary meet the needs of writing. 3. contain some grammatical and spelling errors, but not affect understanding. 4. apply some simple linking words, making its context coherent

11. Level 4: poor (6-10)not properly fulfilled the task. 1. miss or fail to describe some key points whereas write some irrelevant contents. 2. monotonous or dull grammatical structures and limited items of vocabulary 3. contain some grammatical and spelling errors, affect understanding 4. Few linking words, making its context incoherent, or not expressed clearly, failed to clearly deliver information

12. Level 1: failed (0/1-5) failed in the task of writing 1. Obviously leave out the key points instead of writing some irrelevant contents resulting from failure in analysis. 2. Monotonous grammatical structures and limited items of vocabulary 3. Many grammatical and spelling errors, affecting the understanding. 4. Lack of linking words, incoherent narration or description, failed to deliver information. Graded Zero: failed to deliver any info or too little to judge or completely irrelevant writing or too vague or illegible to read.

13. A Writing Task： • 最近，你校同学正在参加某英语报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是：公园要不要收门票？请你根据下表所提供的信息，给报社写一封信，客观地介绍讨论的情况。 注意：1、信的开头已为你写好。 2、词数100左右 参考词汇：门票（entrance fee）

14. Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks.____________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________ Yours truly, Li Hua

15. A reference sample: Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. Opinions are divided on the question. 60% of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believe a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will do harm to the appearance of a city. On the other hand, 40 % think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardeners and workers, and to buy plants and young trees. They suggest, however, fees should be charged low. Yours truly, Li Hua

16. Sample 1: • Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. 60% percent of the students who attended the discussion thought that an entrance fee should not be charged because the parks are public place for people to have a rest. If an entrance fee was charged, they said, it was necessary to build gates and walls, which may distroy the beauty of our city. The rest students agreed to charge an entrance fee. But they also said that the price should not be too high. They considered that the money from the entrance fees could be used to pay for the workers who work in the parks and buy new kinds of plants. If not, they said, all the parks would be closed. I think, it is an interesting question. Best wishes. • Yours truly, Li Hua

17. Comments: • 这篇文章内容全面，思想表达完整清楚。语言流畅。除了一个单词“distroy”之外，基本上无语言错误。且用了复合句、插入语等较为复杂的语言现象. • Score：24

18. Sample 2 • Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. • 60 % of us think that it is unnecessary to charge for parks. And two reasons are given. First, parks are rest places for the public, second, if an entrance fee is charged, gates and walls are required, but these may have bad effect on city looks. The rest thinks it’s needed, but the entrance fee should not be much. And they suggest that the fees be used for gardeners ‘pay and to bring in more plants. I think all of us are quite right. And I hope to see other students’ opinions in the paper. Yours truly, Li Hua

19. Comments: 这篇文章内容全面，思想表达也完整清楚。语言也比较流畅，但有些句子显得不够地道。有几处无语言错误。没有闪光点。 Score: 18

20. Sample 3 • Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. About 60 percent students think that the entrance fee should be free. They say parks are places where people can take a test. But if we are charged for parks, we must build doors, walls and other things, which will infect our feelings. The really purpose of building parks doesn’t exist. About 40 percent students think we should be charged for parks, but not very high. The money is used to buy new plants and to people who works for the parks. It is very important. In my opinion, I think we should be charged for parks. • In a world, the discussion is successful. After the discussion, we talk a lot about it. • Yours truly, Li Hua

21. Comments: • 这篇文章基本切题。思想也基本上表达清楚了。但语言错误不少，文章整体的连贯性较差。 • Score: 13

22. Sample 4 Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. In the students we have interviewed, sixty percent of them think it is no need to take an entrance fee. First, the parks are places for people to have a rest. second, if it takes an entrance fee, a gate and the wall around should be built. And that will effective the view of the sight. But there is forty percent believe taking an entrance fee is needing, only don’t too high. so that we can pay for the parkers, and buy some new followers. Such is our discussion. What others think about it? • Best wishes! • Yours truly, Li Hua

23. Comments： • 这篇文章基本切题，但思想表达不清楚，文章连贯性差。文章中有较多的语言错误，且有一些较的语法错误。 • Score: 8

24. Sample 5 • Dear Editor, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. The park in the city is beauful. we are very like park. So some of students think park is didn’t get entrance free. Because, park is freeing and national, so there is opening There can more and more people go to national, it’s helps of they beauty. Getting entrance fee, is must be have door. That is break down beauful city. But other students think park must get entrance fee. Because, park need workers. So entrance free can pay for them, and can getting more and more flowers and tree. Can charce park more beauful. But entranc free can’t to much more. This is we about whether an entrance free fee. • Yours truly,

25. Comments： 这篇文章逻辑混乱，条理不清。只有个别正确的句子。句子间也没有很好的联系，影响了对文章的理解。 Score: 3