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“I would not have made this so long except that I do not have the leisure to make it shorter .” Blaise Pascal. ?. !. New York Times , April 7, 2007. Readability Index http://www.online-utility.org/english/readability_test_and_improve.jsp.
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“I would not have made this so long except that I do not have the leisure to make it shorter.” Blaise Pascal
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Readability Index http://www.online-utility.org/english/readability_test_and_improve.jsp
Playboy Enterprises Inc. has _____ to outsource most of ___ business operations of its ________ magazine, as it seeks __ stem losses and restore ___ cachet that helped embed ___ brand in the popular ______.
Playboy Enterprises Inc. has agreed to outsource most of the business operations of its namesake magazine, as it seeks to stem losses and restore the cachet that helped embed the brand in the popular culture. (Wall Street Journal, November 23, 2009)
Concision: • How can I say more with less? Choose more specific verbs Eliminate expletive structures Convert nouns into verbs Preserve content and tone
Choose more specific verbs This report is an analysis of the problem. This report analyzes the problem. Savings = 3 words
Choose more specific verbs The administration was supportive of our program. The administrationsupported our program. Savings = 2 words
Eliminate expletive structures There will be a demonstration of the new system today. A representative will demonstrate the new system today. Savings = 2 words
Eliminate expletive structures It is necessary for us to find a solution to this problem. We must solve this problem. $avings = 7 words
Convert nouns into verbs His report contains a recommendation that we purchase a new printer. His reportrecommendsthat we purchase a new printer. Savings = 2 words
Convert nouns into verbs Who is responsible for the supervision of the temporary staff? Whoshould supervise the temporary staff? Savings = 4 words
Preserve content and tone The article includes a discussion of methods for the retention of employees. The article discusses employee retention.
Preserve content and tone The application deadline pass last week on February 1. You missed the February 1 deadline.