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Senior Writing

Senior Writing. Week of Sept. 16 Focus for this week: Wrap up Unit 1 and take test, finish draft and revise Personal Narrative, Revising techniques. Opening – Write the corrected version of the sentence below.

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Senior Writing

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  1. Senior Writing Week of Sept. 16 Focus for this week: Wrap up Unit 1 and take test, finish draft and revise Personal Narrative, Revising techniques

  2. Opening – Write the corrected version of the sentence below. • Its to bad when it’s the weekend and their are so many things I want to do and only 48 hours too do them, so my dog did not get its bath unless you count walking in the rain. • (This is all one sentence – but there are punctuation and word choice issues) Opening - Monday

  3. It’s toobad when it’s the weekend,and theretheirare so many things I want to do and only 48 hours to toodo them, so my dog did not get its bath unless you count walking in the rain. Corrected Opening

  4. Do Lesson 4 – pick up your computer when finished. • Open up the “About Me” Introduction you typed on Sept. 6 • Open up the body paragraphs and conclusion • Revise Introduction to make it flow and add thesis statement. • Consider order • Do not repeat info you covered in the body • Add thesis at end • Look at grammar check as you revise • Have draft ready for submission. • Check MLA format. • Learning Targets: • I will consider audience and purpose when combining my introduction, body, and conclusion. Agenda

  5. Thesis Statement should identify your career/college plan and specify what you have done to prove this is good option. • My love of the outdoors and my family have influenced me to pursue a career as a conservation officer. • From my experiences in CTC and my family members who currently work in construction, I have decided I want to study to be an engineer. • Introduction – Goal is to introduce YOU – let reader get to know you – and NOT repeat what is in body. • Reread introduction • Need to “tweak” it – make thesis last sentence • Transition – As I am finishing my senior year, I have started thinking about my future. OR Everyone keeps asking me what I am going to do after high school, and I am close to making a decision.” • Take out material that is repetitive to body • Review goals of introduction Thesis Statements and Introductions

  6. Body 1 – take first reason and discuss in detail – tell anecdotes, give specific experience, evidence to support your choice. End with statement that ties what you have said to your thesis. • Body 2 – repeat for 2nd reason. • Conclusion – Your plan • How will you go from where you are now to your career, internship, program, etc. • Most will begin something like- As a senior who is about to graduate… or In June, I will be graduating from…. Composing the rest of the paper

  7. Print out a copy to use tomorrow and Wednesday. • Save it somewhere “safe” that you can get to any day you need to this week. • Homework – Mastery Review p. 7, Part A. • Revised Time Line – • Discuss revision process – self and peer. • Submission of draft will be Wednesday. – Sept. 18 • Peer Revision will be Thursday – Sept. 19 • Final will be submitted on Sept. 23. When you have finished composing and putting together ….

  8. “The way to get started is to quit talking and begin doing.” Walt Disney Tuesday - Opening

  9. Correct Mastery Review, Do Part B and Correct • Discuss Improving your writing • Specific Word Choice • Sentence Variety • Using Mature Vocabulary • Using a Variety of Transitions • You will want your handout that has Ten Errors with Transitions on back, your openings with the vocabulary, the hand out on Sentence Variety, and your paper. Tuesday - Agenda

  10. Replace general words with specific ones • Things, stuff, went, go, etc., friends, family (unless you have already specified whom you mean) • Be clear – school, high school, Mona Shores High School. • Up the vocabulary level Improving words

  11. Changing up how you start sentences • Add clauses at beginning of some sentences • Because, Since, While, When, If, During • Look at how you start sentences and change it up. • How do you combine sentences – is it always, “,and”? • Try other conjunctions – for, so, but, nor, or, yet • Try conjunctive adverbs – however, nevertheless • Check the transitions sheet Sentence Variety

  12. You are a senior – need to sound like one • Required to use at least 3 vocab words from openings • Look at the list – look at your sentences Vocabulary

  13. Proof for the “Ten Errors” • Look for a variety of transitions you can use. Ten Errors and Transitions sheet

  14. Improving Writing – Focus on words and sentences • Use “Ten Errors, “Transitions,” “Effective Writing,” and Openings with vocabulary. • Review purpose of these items. • Take out your paper. • Where can you “bump” up the level of your vocabulary? • Where can you change up your sentences – varying how you start sentences, varying the transitions you use? • Write these changes into your paper. • Tomorrow – time to “type” the changes in your paper – but make the plan to do so today. Improving Writing

  15. Mastery Review – the rest of it – up to page 13 is due tomorrow. • Pick up computer • Make changes, improvements to essay • Check MLA format • Special request – increase spacing from double • Submit to Turnitin to Personal Narrative Draft. If you cannot –get it emailed to me please. • Decide who will review your paper and whose paper you will review. • This will be open to you until 6 pm tonight. You can actually start peer reviewing tonight if you wish. • Please log off and return COW at 12:50 Wednesday – No Opening

  16. Please check board for schedule so you are ready when bell rings • Have homework completed. • Use time effectively. • No electronics unless I direct otherwise. • When using computers – be doing what you are supposed to do – any time you spend doing anything else is a waste of your time. Expectations

  17. Opening: Please correct the following. • The student, who turned in the 3-D project showing a remodel of the hallway, has been nominated to receive an award. • Grab your computer as soon as you are finishedand take out your Mastery Review. • You may go ahead and log on and log in to Turnitin, but let me give directions before you go further. Thursday, Sept. 19

  18. Correct Mastery Review • Review rubric for editing • Discuss who will read/share other’s paper • Peer review • Use the rubric and questions • Use your transition sheet and vocabulary and ten errors handout • Learning Targets • I can edit for sufficient use of detail and clarity in another’s paper. • I can correctly edit sentences for correctness in punctuation. Agenda

  19. Learning to review is a life skill • You are providing feedback – try to help this person • Keep rubric and peer review questions in mind. • You must write a min. answer in each of the spaces – more feedback may be given in the text. • Required that you do one and thoroughly – you may read two other people’s with their permission – for extra credit. • If 3 people have read yours – please send people elsewhere when they ask. • Take your time. • Peer feedback will be released at 11:30 pm today – I might up that time – once I see everyone is finished. • When you are finished, please print out a clean copy of your draft. You will need this tomorrow. Peer Review

  20. Goal of Intro – give sense of the person – not repeat what is in body. • Body – Each should be a point mentioned in thesis • Is it specific? Would someone who did not know this person understand the examples? • Does last sentence tie back to thesis. • Conclusion – Goal is to explain how person will move towards the thesis statement plan. Introductions, Body, Conclusion

  21. Friday, Sept. 20Copy quote down for Opening

  22. Questions on Mastery Review • Study for Monday. • Take out clean copy of your essay. • Review comments from peer editors. • Look over your submission sheet. • Make changes, improvements, revisions to your personal narrative. • Submit final to Turnitin.com by end of day on Monday. • If you have a problem, talk with me – email me your paper. • Submission also include filling out your submission sheet. You can work on this as you revise your paper. • Print out items requested. • Highlight what is asked for – Turnitin will take it that way. • You may either turn in to me today or on Monday. • Review Unit 1 for Test on Monday. • Journal 4 Agenda

  23. Prove you looked at and understood revision comments • Print out • Make changes • Explain what you changed • Prepare final • Make it something you would be proud to hand to a boss, recruiter, college as an example of your best work. • Read directions on submission sheet. Revision and Submission

  24. Monday – Unit 1 Test • Be sure Paper is submitted both hard copy materials to me and final copy online • Journal 4 (finish), 5, 6. • Unit 2 Case and Agreement • Collage assignment Preview of Next Week

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