Essay Outline

1. Essay Outline Introduction & Conclusion

2. Introduction – 1st Paragraph Purpose: Introduce your topic, give some background, state your thesis. Contains: • Hook • Link sentence • Background information • Thesis statement

3. The Hook (aka “Grabber,” “Lead sentence”) Purpose of the hook sentence is to . There are several ways to write your hook. • Ask a question • State a startling fact or statistic • Use a quote • Create an ‘Imagine if’ scenario • Set the mood with vivid, specific details • Exaggeration or Outrageous Statement

4. Examples (There’s more; these are just a few.) • Ask a question • Ex: Have you ever gone stand up paddling before? • State an interesting fact • Ex: Stand up paddling improves balance, coordination, and strength. • State a startling statistic • Ex: One in five surfers die from shark attacks every year. • Use a quote • Ex: “Eddie would go” is a famous quote that became popular after the death of Eddie Aikau.

5. Last Examples • Set the mood • Ex: The smooth waves rippled as my paddle dipped gently into its calm surface. • Create a scenario • Ex: Imagine the roar of the ocean, 20 ft. waves pounding the shore, and the rush of adrenaline as the next set comes in. • Exaggeration or Outrageous Statement • Ex: The waves at Jaws were 100 ft. high!

6. Let’s Practice writing a hook • Topic and thesis statement: • Baldwin has one of the best football teams in the state.

7. Practice writing a Hook with the thesis:“Baldwin has one of the best football teams in the state.” • Row 1 – Question • Row 2 – State a startling fact • Row 3 – State a startling statistic • Row 4 – Start with a quote • Group 5 – ‘Imagine if’ scenario

8. Now on to more serious issues…

9. Practice writing a Hook with the thesis:“Honor Killings are a harsh punishment that needs to be banned.” • Row 1 – Question • Row 2 – State a startling fact • Row 3 – State a startling statistic • Row 4 – Start with a quote • Group 5 – ‘Imagine if’ scenario

10. How can you create a hook with your topic? • Relate it to your topic • Catch the reader’s attention • Don’t be too wordy • Make sure if you use a fact/stat, it is accurate! Fact/scenario Example • While most 15-year-olds in America are at the mall hanging out with their friends, boys that age are working from sunrise to sunset hauling wheelbarrows filled with chrome in Zimbabwe.

11. Sample Hook • Imagine a woman being found guilty and sentenced to death because she was kidnapped, abused, and gang-raped.

12. Your Turn • Use one of the hook techniques to write your hook on your outline. • Even if you’re not sure, you can always change it later.

13. Link Sentence • A sentence that comes after the hook. • It leads into your background info. • Sample link sentence: • In Pakistan, women are put to death for such reasons.

14. Background Info. • Assume the reader knows nothing of your topic. • Answer the question, “What is the issue about?” in the most general way possible. • 2-4 sentences that gives an overview; do not include detailed statistics. • It should flow into the thesis statement.

15. Sample Background Info. Incidences like these are a common cultural practice called, “honor killings.” Honor killings occur when a woman brings dishonor to her family because she has had sex before or outside of marriage. In order to restore their honor, the family is obligated to kill her.

16. Hook, Link Sent., Background • Imagine a woman being found guilty and sentenced to death because she was kidnapped, abused, and gang-raped. • In Pakistan, women are put to death for such reasons. • Incidences like these are a common cultural practice called, “honor killings.” Honor killings occur when a woman brings dishonor to her family because she has had sex before or outside of marriage. In order to restore their honor, the family is obligated to kill her.

17. Thesis Statement Topic + opinion + 3 main points = Thesis Statement. • Look at the thesis statement you wrote on your essay web. • Now is the time to revise it if necessary and write it into your Intro outline.

18. Sample Thesis Statement • Honor killings are a cruel punishment that results in the deaths of hundreds of women every year, and it should be banned.

19. Sample Intro Paragraph Imagine a woman being found guilty and sentenced to death because she was kidnapped, abused, and gang-raped.In Pakistan, women are put to death for such reasons.Incidences like these are a common cultural practice called, “honor killings.” Honor killings occur when a woman brings dishonor to her family because she has had sex before or outside of marriage. In order to restore their honor, the family is obligated to kill her. Honor killings are a cruel punishment that results in the deaths of hundreds of women every year, and it should be banned.

20. Concluding Paragraph – Last paragraph in your essay • Transition sentence • Restate thesis statement and three main points in a slightly different way. • End with a powerful thought that leaves the reader thinking

21. Sample Concluding Paragraph • Transition: (Notice the trans. Phrase) • In the end, honor killings are one of the worst human rights violations existing in the world today. • Thesis Statement stated slightly differently They are caused by the cultural norms widely accepted in Pakistan’s male-dominated society, and as a result, thousands of women have died violently. Closing thought: • Imagine if you, your mother, or sister were ‘guilty’ of dishonoring the family, could you allow her to be killed, or even worse, be the one to kill her? Honor killings must stop.

22. Sample Concluding Paragraph In the end, honor killings are one of the worst human rights violations existing in the world today. They are caused by the cultural norms widely accepted in Pakistan’s male-dominated society, and as a result, thousands of women have died violently. Imagine if you, your mother, or sister were ‘guilty’ of dishonoring the family, could you allow her to be killed, or even worse, be the one to kill her? Honor killings must stop.