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Week 11. Revision of the Conclusion . Housekeeping. Do not take notes on your handouts
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Week 11 Revision of the Conclusion
Housekeeping • Do not take notes on your handouts • You should all have at least the first reads of your drafts in by now. These are graded quite critically, so your grade might not be what you wanted. Make sure that you are paying attention to the commentary and revising accordingly. Also, take these revision exercises (both in class and on Raider Writer) very seriously. We are giving you the tools to succeed– use them. • I had an interesting experience last week…
…I can relate to Diamond now. • My car broke down on Thursday. • I took it to the mechanic, and he told me what the problem was, and how much it was going to cost, and not much else. • Would it have made a difference?
What do they do? How should they be structured? Think about conclusions
Conclusions • Close your essay • They make your essay memorable • Should leave your audience feeling satisfied with your rhetoric • This is your last chance to get your point across • Often use “crutch” phrases • Restate your thesis statement • Uses the opposite of a hook (in keeping with the fishing metaphor, I am going to call this a release) that makes your audience think about what you have said.
Structure of the Conclusion • Restatement of your thesis statement (paraphrased) • Wrapping up of ideas, summarizing arguments • Make sure that you are not including new information • Release to make your audience think about what you have said
Conclusions in Other Papers • Unlike introductions, these are not usually very long • Depending on the field, academic articles can have conclusions of only a few sentences • This varies based on the context, of course, so be aware of what you need to do here. • In this course, your conclusion is a single paragraph of a decent length.
Releases • Quotation • Usually a parallel to your hook, if you used a quotation there. • Question • “So what?” • Vivid Image • Illustrate a situation for your readers. Show them how this applies to them. • Call for Action • Call them to do something. • Warning • Tell them what will happen if they ignore your writing
Brief Assignment 8 • Copy and paste your original conclusion • Write a short evaluation of it (RW says a sentence or two) • Revise your conclusion • Write a paragraph explaining and evaluating your revision • This looks familiar, doesn’t it? • 350-500 words
Let’s take a look at the sample conclusions If we have time
Find a partner • Come see me if you don’t have a copy of your conclusion • Critique each other’s conclusions • When you are done • Give the first page to your partner • Turn in the last page • Have a good day • Bring a full copy of your draft next week
Congrats • Christi McCoy, in Section 053, was the only student to actually get my costume. • Here is a gold star: