Revisions

1. Revisions Fragments and Run-Ons

2. In the spring, when the warm sun shines upon the fresh, green, beauty of the earth and when red tulips wave in the March winds.

3. Fragment: A separated sentence part that does not express a complete thought. • Run-On Sentence: A sentence consisting of two or more sentences separated only by a comma or by no mark of punctuation. Complete Sentences

4. In 1682 William Harvey published his new theory. Which explained the circulation of the blood by the motion of the heart. • The main focus of the photo of Iwo Jima. Is the flag being put up. Fragments

5. It also brought another symbolic meaning. The meaning a nation that was united. • We talked with Mrs. Jackson in the school office. The school principal. • Scratching noises on the cabin porch indicated that I had a visitor. Probably a raccoon or a wildcat. Fragments

6. Identify the fragment. • President Barack Obama, Vice President Joe Biden, members of Congress and their families will be rolling up their sleeves at service projects in our nation's capital. But you don't have to be in Washington to get involved. From repairing fire-damaged homes in Colorado and cleaning sidewalks in Detroit to spending time with children with disabilities in New Orleans. Every state will offer opportunities to volunteer. Fragments Practice

7. Identify the fragment. • President Barack Obama, Vice President Joe Biden, members of Congress and their families will be rolling up their sleeves at service projects in our nation's capital. But you don't have to be in Washington to get involved. From repairing fire-damaged homes in Colorado and cleaning sidewalks in Detroit to spending time with children with disabilities in New Orleans. Every state will offer opportunities to volunteer. Fragments Practice

8. Where are Riff and Raff those cats won’t call come when I call them. • Last year we spent our vacation in Pennsylvania, this summer we plan to drive through the southwest. Run-on sentences

9. Find the run-on. • All these projects have one big thing in common. They're making a community, our country and our world better, that's part of what makes service special. Whether it's volunteering time, skills, ideas or resources, we all can make a difference. When I was growing up, my parents and grandparents taught me that engaging in service, helping our neighbors and building strong communities are all part of being a good citizen and a good person. Run-on Practice

10. Find the run-on. • All these projects have one big thing in common. They're making a community, our country and our world better, that's part of what makes service special. Whether it's volunteering time, skills, ideas or resources, we all can make a difference. When I was growing up, my parents and grandparents taught me that engaging in service, helping our neighbors and building strong communities are all part of being a good citizen and a good person. Run-on Practice

11. “ These three portraits have reasoning behind it the names of these people that designed and painted these portraits are Durer,VanGogh,Dali these people painted their portraits to show and signify their personality and expression on their portraits that they painted and made every piece that each of these artist painted or made has a reasoning behind it and were going to discuss about each of these three paintings.” Revise:

12. A subordinate clause always depends on an independent clause to complete its meaning. • “Although Bertha receives a large allowance” • This clause has a verb, receives, and a subject, Bertha. But because of the word, although, however, the thought is not complete. • This sentence can be corrected by attaching it to an independent clause. Subordinate Clauses

13. Although Bertha receives a large allowance. • Unless you packed a dress shirt. • Although it was nothing more than a small village. • Which was the cause of the war. Subordinate Clause Fragments

14. Deep Space Industries says it wants to start sending miniature scout probes, dubbed "Fireflies," on one-way missions to near-Earth asteroids as soon as 2015. Larger probes, "Dragonflies," that will bring back 50- to 100-pound samples from prospective targets. Which could be on their way by 2016, company CEO David Gump told reporters Identify the fragment

15. Deep Space Industries says it wants to start sending miniature scout probes, dubbed "Fireflies," on one-way missions to near-Earth asteroids as soon as 2015. Larger probes, "Dragonflies," that will bring back 50- to 100-pound samples from prospective targets. Which could be on their way by 2016, company CEO David Gump told reporters Identify the Fragment

16. The goal is to extract metals, water and compounds that can be used to make spacecraft fuel from the chunks of rock that gloat within about 50 million kilometers (31 million miles) of Earth. Gump commented on the ability to produce fuel in space. Would be a boon for NASA. As the U.S. space agency shifts its focus toward exploring deeper into the solar system. Find the Fragment

17. The goal is to extract metals, water and compounds that can be used to make spacecraft fuel from the chunks of rock that gloat within about 50 million kilometers (31 million miles) of Earth. Gump commented on the ability to produce fuel in space. Would be a boon for NASA. As the U.S. space agency shifts its focus toward exploring deeper into the solar system. Find the Fragment

18. A verbal phrase is a phrase containing a verbal. (A past participle or gerund with an –ing, -d, -ed, -t, -n, -en) • Slept, broken, going, • Infinitives consisting of to+verb • To play • To work Verbal Phrases

19. A verbal phrase is often mistaken for a sentence because the verbal is mistaken for the main verb. • However, a phrase does not have both a subject and a verb therefore it cannot express a complete thought. Verbal Phrases

20. Spilling juice all over the floor • Poised on her toes • Saying goodbye • To approve his son’s marriage • Like subordinate clauses, verbals depends upon independent clauses to make their meaning complete. Verbal Phrases

21. Find the Verbal and correct it: • The U.S. military is ending its policy of excluding women from combat and will open combat jobs and direct combat units to female troops, multiple officials told CNN on Wednesday. Defense Secretary Leon Panetta will make the announcement Thursday. Notifying Congress of the planned change in policy, the officials said. Verbal Phrases

22. The U.S. military is ending its policy of excluding women from combat and will open combat jobs and direct combat units to female troops, multiple officials told CNN on Wednesday. Defense Secretary Leon Panetta will make the announcement Thursday. Notifying Congress of the planned change in policy, the officials said. Verbal Phrases

23. "We will eliminate the policy of 'no women in units that are tasked with direct combat,'" a senior defense official said. Cautioned, however, that "not every position will open all at once on Thursday." Once the policy is changed, the Department of Defense will enter what is being called an "assessment phase," in which each branch of service will examine all its jobs and units not currently integrated and then produce a timetable for integrating them. Verbal Phrases

24. "We will eliminate the policy of 'no women in units that are tasked with direct combat,'" a senior defense official said. Cautioned, however, that "not every position will open all at once on Thursday." Once the policy is changed, the Department of Defense will enter what is being called an "assessment phase," in which each branch of service will examine all its jobs and units not currently integrated and then produce a timetable for integrating them. Verbal Phrases

25. Albrecht Duerer first uses, stylistic choices such as facial expressions, color usages, and background colors to express his personalities in his self-portrait.  His facial expression looks serious and gives the feeling of guilt.  Which could convey his serious personality and getting guit come from his audience personality.  His color usages were painted with warmer colors and rich colors which might display his clean personality and rich personality.  His background colors in other words are painted with warmer and rich color which might empathize that this is who he is and that he is rich or a proper gentleman. Revisions Practice

26. Vincent Van Gogh used cool calming color’s consisting of many blues and greens and just a tad of orange.Just by looking at the painting you feel pretty calm maybe a bit relaxed.Van Gogh’s  facial expression is very relaxed.That when he was painting his portrait he could have been relaxed.Also since his portrait is very mellow Van Gogh could have been a mellow person himself.Van Gogh could have been calm while painting because of the mood and his facial expression. Revisions Practice

27. The last artist is Dali the colors he used were black and white.The colors made me feel like I was in a dark forest.But also the way Dali’s facial expression is,it reminds me of the joker because of Dali’s mustache.Dali could have excited while painting his portrait.Because he is putting his face on the Mona Lisa like a crazy,funnyperson.Dali could have been a funny person because his portrait is funny.Or he could have been a very different person for example very serious. Revisions Practice

28. Mood is also an attribute in art that is used to exert emotion or expression. The self portrait of Durer exerts a very serious and mysterious mood. It gives off a calm but dark feeling when you view it. It isn’t exactly peaceful but calm. The self-portrait of Van Gogh is very sad and mellow. His body and expression is not at all tense but soothed and unalarmed. Dali’s self-portrait is humorous. Especially since he placed his face inside the Mona Lisa holding gold. Mood is an essential part of a self-portrait. Revisions Practice

29. The main focus of the photo of Iwo Jima. Is the flag. The flag was weathered and beat up because all it’s gone through in the war. This flag gave hope for the Americans. It gave them hope for victory. It also brought another symbolic meaning. The meaning of a nation that was united. This flag meant that the nation was united and nothing could break it apart. The flag capture all the attention because of its meaning. The flag appears to be the main point. It is right in the center of the picture. Which i think it is intended to be the main focus. The fla not only stand for the main point in the photo but also exemplifies the effort it took to get up there, because the island of Iwo Jima was not in a good shape. Revisions Practice

30. William Goldings ‘Lord of the Flies’ the symbol of fire. The boys are on the mountain and they catch the mountain on fire and they weren’t suppose to catch the mountain on fire, because the mountain was they only way to get rescued is what the boys think. Than Piggy gets mad because they have to find a new way to get rescued. Because of the fire they need to find a way to get rescued. And instead they have to find a way to stop the fire. Revision Practice

31. Short sentences are often effective in a composition but a long series of short sentences is a sign of an immature style. • Combine short, related sentences by inserting adjectives, adverbs or prepositional phrases. Sentence Combination

32. Pearl S. Buck was an American Writer. She was a great writer. • She wrote about the Chinese way of life. She was passionate. • Pearl S. Buck won the Pulitzer prize. She won the Pulitzer prize for her novel, The Good Earth. Sentence combination practice

33. In my hands money doesn’t last long. My aunt sent me ten dollars. It was a birthday present. I held onto the money for about ten minutes. My brother demanded repayment. I had borrowed two dollars from him a week before. Marcia and Jenny are my best friends. They had treated me to lunch a long time ago. They suddenly suggested that I return the favor. My mother’s birthday is next week. I am almost broke. Maybe I can make something for her, like a cake. It won’t cost me money. Sentence Combination Practice